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Chapter 8 | The Tale of Two Kingdoms

Finder's Kept

Cautions: Adult situations and language, and not entirely consensual sex. I promise there will be happier sex, and soon.

Temmin had a hard night of it, dreams overtaken by the story he'd heard. The hapless girl writhed with unwanted passion in the Traveler Prince's arms, until suddenly Temmin was the one holding her. He crushed her nakedness against him and kissed her through her moans. When the kiss ended, he wasn't kissing the princess; she was the maid at Whithorse that night in the garden, the one that looked so much like Arta, the one whose name he'd never learned. Tears ran down her cheeks, and the red ribbons of her cap laced through her hair like the threads of blood down the princess's legs.

He woke up shaking, aroused, ashamed and in a terrible temper, made worse when he looked out the window and saw it pouring rain. Worse and worse. No ride that morning.

Temmin pulled on a robe and stalked into the study, scouring the shelves for a particular volume. He found it, threw himself on his sofa and began paging through it as fast as he could. Jenks was waved off--"Just bring me something, coffee, eggs, toast, bacon, something, I don't care." When Jenks came back with a tray, Temmin didn't stop reading but moved to the library table and ate with the book propped in front of him. He dressed perfunctorily and went straight back to scanning pages. Jenks left the study visibly disturbed but silent.

When the Teacher appeared, Temmin was ready, and he pounced the minute the black-robed figure swept through the door.

"Look, you," he said, waving the official history of the royal family in the Teacher's face, "I've been through this a half-dozen times looking for the name 'Edmerka.' It's not there. There has never been an Edmerka in my family, or mentioned in our history! Explain to me what you're doing." He let the book drop onto the library table with a clonk and took up pacing in front of the rain-drop-spattered window.

"From the looks of you, I'd wager you didn't ride this morning," said the Teacher.

"What was your first clue, the buckets descending from the heavens? Hey for you, you win," said Temmin. "Answer my question."

"What an extraordinarily rude boy you are this morning. I sometimes wonder if the Keep itself has this effect on Tremonts, drawing something out in the blood." The Teacher slid the red leather book from the day before across the library table. "Any answer I'm inclined to give you is in here."

He opened it. "It's blank again."

"It's enchanted."

"Really!" exclaimed Temmin. "You amaze me!"

"Your highness, your impertinence is close to becoming inexcusable," said the Teacher in a cold, steady voice. "Watch yourself."

"Answer my question, damn you!"

Before he knew quite what had happened, Temmin found himself pinned face-down over the back of the sofa, his trousers and drawers around his ankles. "I told you, this is my answer to impertinent boys," hissed the Teacher in his ear.

"I'm not a boy!" shouted Temmin, struggling against--against what? There was no one and nothing holding him down. The Teacher moved in front of him long enough to show him a cane in one hand. Temmin heard it come cutting through the air behind him, just before it made contact. His vision clouded with pain as the cane drew a long burning line on his ass. The cane flashed again, hitting the tops of his thighs, and then again, crossing the first stripe in a shallow "X." His bravado broke, and he howled, tears flowing freely.

"Will you disrespect me again?" the Teacher said.

"No! Please stop!"

"Swear!"

"Never again! I swear! I swear!" he sobbed.

"Very well," said the Teacher, coming around to face him again. The Teacher studied Temmin's ruddy, humiliated face for a moment. "Now. We will discuss what is really bothering you. Yes, your highness?"

"Yes," he said, bringing his tears under control. Temmin looked up to find the Teacher's face quite close to his own. The gray eyes were full of tenderness and fading anger.

"I release you," the Teacher said wistfully and turned away from the sofa. Temmin suddenly found himself able to move, and he quickly yanked up his drawers and trousers, turning away from the Teacher himself to hide--he didn't want to think about it. "You might find it easier," said the Teacher to the window, "to sit on a cushion for an hour or so, but the pain will fade shortly. Before you decide to hate me, know that if I had really beaten you, you'd be unable to sit for a week."

"That makes it much better, thank you," said Temmin sardonically, sitting down gingerly at the library table.

"Now," said the Teacher, "we shall discuss what it is that has you in such a state this morning."

Temmin wondered what to say. "The story you began yesterday," he began. "It disturbed me."

"What about it disturbed you?"

""I don't want to believe my family has had anything to do with such things."

"And yet?" prompted the Teacher.

"And yet..." He trailed off into embarrassed silence.

"And yet you find yourself aroused by the princess's predicament. Don't you." Temmin's jaw tightened, but he didn't deny it. "I wonder," the Teacher said. "Have you ever kissed a girl?"

"I beg your pardon?" said Temmin hotly.

"You very well may beg my pardon, young sir. I suggest you sit down all the way onto your sore behind, beg my pardon most sincerely and answer my question."

"I do beg your pardon, Teacher. Yes, I have," said Temmin sullenly.

"Ah. When and where, please."

"Last summer at Whithorse."

"And who was she?" asked the Teacher.

Temmin looked uncomfortable. "A maid."

"What was her name?"

"I don't know!" said Temmin, getting up to pace. "I never knew her name."

"What were the circumstances?"

"I was walking in the garden at night. I like to walk, you know, when I'm thinking. I wasn't looking for anyone, I wasn't doing anything. But I found a maid, with a footman." He thrust his hands in his pockets, and his pace slowed as he thought. "They were--well. Their clothes were in quite the disarray, let's say." He fell silent again, but a tiny smile quirked the corner of his mouth. "They begged me not to tell. I said I wouldn't, on one condition."

"And what was that?" said the Teacher quietly.

"I--I said I wouldn't tell if she kissed me."

"And did she?"

Temmin stopped pacing. "Yes. Yes, she did. I sent the footman away, and then she kissed me."

"You kissed her, you mean. And more than that."

Temmin leaned against the library table, then thought better of it and stood, his hands still deep in his pockets. "What happened to her?" he asked. "You know, don't you."

"She was dismissed on your father's next visit to Whithorse, which as you may recall, was within the week."

"Because of me."

"Yes, because of you. Her name is Mattie. She's all right," the Teacher added. "No horrible morality tale ending. But as it happens, she was more than happy to leave Whithorse, your highness, and return to her family."

"You knew, before I said anything. You knew!" He paced furiously. "Were you gazing through some magical shrubbery or something?"

"There are many ways of keeping track of someone, your highness, almost all of which involve no magic at all."

Temmin stopped abruptly. "So someone at Whithorse was spying on me."

"Your highness," sighed the Teacher, "you are a member of the royal family. More to the point, you are the Heir. Someone has always been, is now, and will always be watching everything you do, now and when you're king. If I didn't know your mother, I would be astonished that you'd never noticed this before."

"You knew about this when you started telling me this story." The Teacher nodded. "I didn't rape that girl, Teacher!"

"What did you do, then?"

"I--I just took a kiss and a squeeze," he answered.

"Did she seem all that happy with the idea?"

"She was happy I didn't tell the butler, I'll tell you that much!"

"So you didn't rape her so much as blackmail her."

Temmin looked at the Teacher blankly. "She said yes."

"Under coercion," said the Teacher softly.

Temmin was silent for a long time. "What happened to the girl? The princess?" The Teacher nudged the leather-bound book. Temmin sat back down on the temporarily cushioned chair and hesitantly opened the book. The pages filled up before him, and the study faded away.

Not long after the Travelers left the princess, the woodsman who lived in the only nearby cottage left his home, folding his tall, lean frame to cross the low threshhold. A slight breeze played with the ends of his neatly braided dark hair as he walked into the forest to check on the horses he thought he'd heard; he wasn't sure if he'd been asleep or dreaming. The path opened up onto the clearing, and he froze. There before him, a beautiful girl lay sleeping. She was naked as the day she came into the world, despite the autumn chill. Her long hair was a glossy chestnut brown that shone even in the moonlight. It had been a great deal of time since he'd seen any woman's body, let alone one quite this lush. For a moment, he thought she might be dead. He knelt down and brushed her hair from her soft cheek, and she awoke with a start.

"It's all right, it's all right," he soothed, moving away slightly. "I won't hurt you. My name is Warin. Here--" He took off his cloak and offered it to her as she frantically tried to cover her body. "Who are you? How did you get all the way out here like this?"

The girl huddled into the cloak and stared around her. Her eyes must be blue, he thought, it was hard to tell in this light. Oh, to see such eyes in such a face, looking up at him--A shiver passed through her, and she blushed. "I--I don't know!" She burst into tears. "I don't know how I got here!"

"What's your name?"

She didn't know. She didn't know who her people were, or where she was from. She didn't know the answer to a single question he asked her.

"Never mind, it's all right," he said, and took her to his little cottage. Once inside, he found a soft, old smock for her to wear, stoked the fire, and put her next to the hearth on a little stool to warm herself. "I have some porridge left from supper, would you like some?" he asked. She nodded, and he spooned up a bowl, then sat nearby on his only chair.

Warin studied her in the light from the fire--a strong brow, fine nose, soft mouth and round chin set in an oval face. From the set of that chin, he could see she was probably quite obstinate when she wasn't frightened, which she was now.

"You must be from Leutefloss, that much I can tell," he said.

"Oh?"

"You have an eastern accent."

She smiled briefly, and charming dimples appeared in her cheeks. "I think that perhaps you have the accent, not me."

Her hands, when she took the bowl of porridge from his, were soft and white. This was not a girl accustomed to work of any kind, it was clear.

"Do you live here alone?" she said.

He nodded. "Not even a dog." They lapsed into silence again as she ate, scraping the bowl clean. He wondered how long it had been since she'd last eaten.

"What's going to happen to me?" she finally said in a small voice.

"You have no memory at all of your people, where you belong?" Warin asked. She shook her head. "Well," he said, after some thought, "you're welcome to stay here until you decide what to do. I'd take you to the nearest village if you'd rather. Maybe you could find work there."

"I don't know how to do anything," she said, tears forming again. "I don't remember what I did before you found me, not a thing!"

"It's all right," he repeated as reassuringly as he could. "I can teach you how to get along, don't cry, you'll be all right." Warin took her soft hand in his callused one and tried to comfort her. But it had been so long since he'd touched another person, let alone a girl; he gently stroked her hand, so white and soft in his own tanned and callused one. The image of her lying there in the clearing--naked, vulnerable, such full breasts and hips--came unbidden into his mind's eye. He wondered what she would feel like in his arms, and his cock twitched in response, hardening. Her mouth was so inviting, her eyes wide and dark and filled with desire--desire?

She quickly averted her gaze. She was shivering again, and a blush was spreading upward from her breast to her face as she fidgeted on the low stool. "Are you unwell?" he said, concerned.

"I don't know," she cried, "I don't know anything, I don't know what I'm feeling, I don't understand. No," she clutched his hand as he moved to drop hers. "Please, I don't know what's happening to me, don't leave."

"I won't," he said softly, watching the struggle on her beautiful face. "Eddin, Wise One," he prayed silently, "please give me strength, otherwise I shall have her whether she's willing or not."

"It's you," she whispered. "I can feel what you want to do to me." She stared at the floor, still clutching his hand, and tears dripped off her chin onto the hearth tiles. "You want to--and I want to--how can I feel this way? I don't know you, I shouldn't feel this way, oh, Amma, what do I do?"

Speechless, Warin tilted her gaze up to meet his. He searched her face with his dark eyes, brushing away her tears with his thumb, then leaned down and gently kissed her. She returned it, opening her lips with a moan.

Warin's resolve broke, and he swept her up into his arms, crushing her to him. She didn't fight or protest. But though she clung to him, he felt a hesitation, as if she were fighting her body's own inclination and losing.

Warin pulled away from her and cupped her face in his hands. "Will you come to bed with me?" he asked her. He felt more than saw the fierce blush in her cheeks. She twined her arms around his neck, let out a small whimper, and held him even closer to her.

He took that for her answer. Warin picked her up and carried her to his narrow bed. He helped her out of her smock, then quickly stripped out of his clothes himself.

Warin was awkward. It had been a long time since he'd had a woman, and he fleetingly worried whether he could please her. But when he looked into her eyes, he saw his longing returned. Suddenly, he didn't really care how awkward he might be.

He groaned and buried his head in her plump breasts. She smelled of fresh air on skin, campfire smoke, roses and lavender, and warm girl. He breathed deep, his erection pushing against her belly.

But the strange reluctance remained, and it troubled him. Even so, Warin pushed her legs apart and centered himself. "I'm sorry," he whispered almost to himself, and entered her. She was breathtakingly wet, so wet he groaned in pleasure, and so tight he was sure she was not used to this. He closed his eyes. Surrounded in her heat, he paused to control himself, until he made the mistake of opening his eyes and looking down at her. "Oh, Nerr," he swore. She was suffused with pink and breathing hard, her breasts rising and falling beneath him, conflict clear on her face. He felt himself harden further.

"It's been so long--I'm sorry, I'm not going to last--oh gods, I--" He felt his orgasm begin, and there was nothing he could do but push into her as fast as he could. He felt her walls pulsing in time with her heart and to his surprise she began arching up to meet him until she cried out, eyes closed tight, fingers digging into his arms. He came, hard, shouting incoherently until the shudders shaking him subsided and he fell next to her, breathless.

When he recovered, he rolled over to face her, only to find her holding the smock tightly against her body. Her eyes were still closed, but tears seeped through and rolled down the sides of her face.

"Was this not--didn't you want this?" he said, chagrined and guilty, for deep down he'd known the answer all along.

"I don't know what I want," she sobbed. "I don't know what I want!"

"Oh!" said Warin, heartsick. "Oh, don't cry, please!" But her tears continued to fall, harder than before. He got up from the bed, urged her to stand, and turned down the blankets. He coaxed her back into the bed and tucked her in by herself, stroking her hair and murmuring nonsense until she calmed, then got up and threw on his shirt.

He sat back down on the edge of the bed and took her hand again. "I'll sleep by the hearth tonight," he said.

"No," she answered, struggling up on one elbow. "This is your bed."

"And so I decide what to do with it," he said firmly, pressing her gently back down. They looked at each other quietly, and a little warily. "I wish I knew your name," Warin finally said.

"Give me one."

"All right," he said, thinking. "I'll call you...Emmae."

"That's pretty," she yawned. "I like it."

"Go to sleep, Emmae."

She closed her eyes, and was asleep in minutes.

Warin watched her until he was sure she was asleep. He rose from the edge of the bed and looked down on her soberly, then turned to the hearth. He threw a log onto the banked coals. "Burn," he said, and the flames rose up instantly. He watched the flames flicker until he saw one that was bright, bright as the sun, and he made a snatching motion in the air. The light gathered in his hands, and he drew it out into a wand. He drew patterns in the air with it above the sleeping girl's body, glowing gold, and stared as other figures appeared in answer, floating silver in the air. Warin studied them, frowned, and drew the covers back until he could see the girl's hip. There was the silver mark, glowing faintly. The wand dissipated into the air with a wave of his hand.

He covered her again and sat down hard in his chair. He should have known, he thought. She was so obviously unused to work or hardship of any kind, and so obviously enchanted. "I hadn't wanted to know, and could you blame me?" he thought. "Yes," he answered himself, "you were taught better than this."

Remorse filled Warin's heart. He wasn't sure of the exact enchantment, but he had a fair notion. There was nothing he could do to break it, but he could protect her for now until he figured out how to lift the spell and which rich merchant family she belonged to in Leutefloss. Besides, he'd been alone for many years, though by choice, and he was lonely. Even if he had to sleep on the hearth, her presence seemed to be a good omen.

In the meantime, he would teach her how to survive, keep away from her as best he could, and not frighten her. In his mind, that included not telling her about the spell that held her. He fetched his bedroll from the cupboard, spread it out before the hearth, and quickly fell asleep.

Prince Temmin came to, blinking and sleepy like the woodsman.

"You need to walk around now," said the Teacher, lifting him up by the elbow.

"Leave me," said Temmin, shrugging the hands away.

"As you wish," said the Teacher. "We are done for today in any event. I suggest you eat something and perhaps go for a walk or ride. The sun came out while we were studying."

After the Teacher left, Temmin stood looking out the window onto the lawn, fresh and a bit soggy after the spring rain. His head was full of thoughts and images but none of them would come together. He had trouble telling which were his and which were Warin's.

Off in the woods, he suddenly spotted something bright among the trees, a tiny dot of color, and he fetched the spyglass from a nearby shelf. Focusing it, the dot resolved into a little house--no, a caravan, brightly painted in red with scrolls of yellow and blue. Sitting atop its driver's box was a handsome young man with rusty hair and an old woman, dressed like Travelers.

Reaching up to take the young man's hand was his sister, Sedra.

The Intimate History books are drafts. Keep that in mind as you read. A fully edited and revised version of each book will appear beginning in 2010.

Scryer's Gulch stands and falls on its own, a true soap opera. Never look back, never revise, just make shit up to explain those plot holes away! Yeehaw!

Creative Commons LicenseAn Intimate History of the Greater Kingdom and Scryer's Gulch by Lynn Siprelle writing as MeiLin Miranda are licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 United States License.

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Flak's picture

Hahaha, parallels. He'll

Hahaha, parallels. He'll probably have an un-pretty reaction to seeing Sedra in that position. I mean to comment on the last chapter, but was in a rush as I was finishing it up on Tuesday. In any event, nice writing, and I'm still reading.

M's picture

magic in literature

I find it so sad when a story portrays magic as a thing once great but greatly declined. So many novels and fantasy game storylines have a great lost civilization. Or some pronounced decline in magic as the world slowly gives way to something more like our world. Im not saying its a bad way to write, but that I get sad when I read about it like that. Like the golden age is gone and we get to witness the struggle of a diminished world. It just seems like an extremely common theme to me.

Why is it that even a powerful royal family, which used to be so strong in magic, is almost the last vestige when you used to be able to find magic in merchant convoys and random guys in the woods?

MeiLin's picture
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stay with me

please. Just stick with it and trust.

Voyeur's picture

I agree with M, it is indeed

I agree with M, it is indeed sad.

But an author who can write a story with such depth, and that can call forth such emotions, is a great one by any standards.

Eustacia's picture

Feeling a lot less sympathy

Feeling a lot less sympathy for Temmin now that I know he's sexually assaulted a girl.
Also hard to feel sympathy for the lonely woodsman-- sure, he's going to protect her now, but even without the enchantment, that might qualify as sex under duress.
Here's hoping we get one likeable male charecter.

MeiLin's picture
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I believe

in redemption. If I didn't, I would have killed myself years ago.

And I don't mean "redemption" in a religious sense.

Good people sometimes do bad things--I don't know anyone who's never ever done *something* wrong, even the best people I know. It's how they set things right that makes the difference.

This is just the beginning of a very long story, and the story is that of the redemption not just of Temmin but the entire kingdom.

M's picture

Well...

If Temmin had no flaws, then it would actually be harder to relate to him wouldnt it? He feels bad about what he did and is trying to mentally cope with the issue.

Even though I personally feel sad about the diminished magic thing, this story has a lot of emotion and great characters. I look forward to more updates.

cobalt's picture

"Why is it that even a

"Why is it that even a powerful royal family, which used to be so strong in magic, is almost the last vestige when you used to be able to find magic in merchant convoys and random guys in the woods?"

I think that Warin the Woodsman is actually Warin the First (or perhaps Warin the Wise), who showed up in Temmin's list of ancestors. So, I don't think he's just a common man in the woods, and I don't think everyone could do magic. The Travelers also sound a little bit like gypsies, so to me it's unsurprising that they could do magic. In many stories, even when no one else can do magic, there are a few who can, plus the gypsies. I don't know how much of a decline this is...except in the royal family. Teacher can do magic, and I would guess the Travelers can too, although we don't know for sure.

M's picture

But

The point was, in the present, there only seems to be the teacher and now Temmin. In the past there seems to have been many more. Whoever Warin is, he really was just a guy that happened to be in those woods. Magic used to be common enough that you could encounter multiple unrelated people who could use it. This does not seem to be the case in the present. Temmin seemed totally unprepared for any of Teacher's magic.

Toad's picture

Patience

I think you are leaping to conclusions based on insufficient data, and you should give the story more time to describe the present before you assume that Temmin knows the truth about his world.

He seems to me like a rather sheltered 16-year-old boy, and there are few of those who know everything about the world, and fewer still who have all correct information. Most of them have huge holes in their knowledge of the world, and many many fallacious assumtions that they believe to be fact.

M's picture

maybe

Edmerka was sheltered as well, but she took it as common knowledge that travelers could see the future. It would seem that is no longer the case.

Temmin was being educated his whole youth, surely as future ruler someone would tell him of magic's existence if it was still common.

Ellie's picture

A Little Leeway

For those ragging Temmin for assulting a girl, I'd like to point out a few things it brought to my mind:

1) Temmin does not seem like a womaniser, nor malicious or lascivious in intent. And if he's as naive as he seemed, it's possible that he didn't understand the sexual implications.

2) It is blatantly obvious that Temmin is far more familiar with the ways of horses than people, and it could be that, in his naivety, coercion and blackmail were more abstracts and not things real people did - and truthfully, may be the failing of those who reared him, for not including the harsher truths of human nature in his upbringing and education.

3) Also, the maid herself is at fault - while Temmin may have blackmailed her, he would have had nothing to blackmail her WITH had she not also been doing something wrong. She COULD have always chosen to fess up her own wrongdoing, and report Temmin's attempt to blackmail her -or to point out that that waswhat he was doing. I wouldn't be surprised if, confronted with it at that point, he would have been immediately ashamed.

erewhon's picture

Very well done.

Most excellent stuff. Smiling

I find myself fascinated more and more. Not only do you wordsmith extremely well, there's quite a strong Muse at work here. The story is...interesting.

I will agree that it seems a trifle cliche', the 'mundane world after the magic is gone' meme is old and well-traveled, but at the same time, there are hints....

If magic is so down and out, what explains the Teacher?

Who, aside from being a very naughty old man, also appears quite proficient at magic.

Has magic simply gone underground? This world seems post-industrial but pre-production line.... Has the rising tide of industrial technologies simply swamped out the perceived effects of magic?

Perhaps magic in this world is a subtle thing, useful for seeing and knowing. Such effects seem weak compared to cannons and rifles and steam-powered looms and gas lamps, but are extremely powerful in the hands of the rulers.

Perhaps the Royals are suppressing magic among the populace, to keep it for themselves?

Also, the presence of teacher implies a great many things....

It is obvious Daddy had an..intense relationship with the man, as did most of the rest of the family. Does this imply the Royals are mere figureheads and mouthpieces for some immotal magical cabal? Teacher is using the wisdom of ages, a dose of magic, and more than a trace of seduction to keep the Kingdom under his grip?

If so, for what ends? Benign or nefarious?

I am intrigued. Laughing out loud

tee hee's picture

The Travelers

Could those two at the last be the same of the story in the story? =P

Toad's picture

Traveling is fun

If they looked the same as the two in Temmin's imagination, he would have said so.

Teacher's magic may not give him accurate personal images, but it does seem to give him very vivid images, and the looking glass (itself a magical item, if I had to guess) apparently gave Temmin a very close-up view.

Of course, since the Travelers have so much magic available to them, perhaps it is the same two and they have changed their appearances many times over the years. Smiling

MeiLin's picture
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the spyglass

was just a regular old spyglass--pocket telescope. The glimpse Temmin got was barely enough to see that it was Sedra.

Toad's picture

"Sitting atop its driver's

"Sitting atop its driver's box was a handsome young man with rusty hair and an old woman, dressed like Travelers."

That line was my justification for my comment on a magic looking glass. Turning a dot of bright color into people you can judge the attractiveness of and recognize from a look at their face is a very powerful looking glass.

I'm guessing 20-20 vision on Temmin, and a distance of three quarters of a mile or more between him and the wagon. The pocket telescopes I used to play with as a child couldn't come close to resolving that kind of detail.

My grandfather was a bird-watcher, and I once spent an afternoon (when I was 11 or 12) experimenting with his (very expensive) binoculars. They could resolve birds from as far away as 750 yards, but they were nearly useless beyond that, in my hands, anyway. My vision was not 20-20, and I had to use the binoculars without my glasses, so perhaps my vision reduced the effective range of the binoculars. I never asked him, since I assumed he would just have been upset I was endangering his expensive toy.

Are my assumptions about these devices that far out of whack?

MeiLin's picture
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a good handheld spyglass

...according to my sources, can see far enough to recognize a person about a half-mile off.

ETA: Actually, my source says you could make out a person through a good spyglass a nautical mile off, which is well over a standard mile.

SongCoyote's picture

Ow. And I mean that in a

Ow. And I mean that in a good way.

Warin's remorse is both sad and powerfully appropriate. The curse caught him up in it in a way, and though he regrets not listening to his doubts, his resolve to do something about it and "keep away from her" do a lot to redeem him for his indiscretion. Hopefully he will be able to do and learn enough to forgive himself.

I know it's not easy to do.

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

kawaiikune's picture
Embodiment

correction?

Her eyes were must be blue -> Her eyes must be blue

MeiLin's picture
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fixed

Comes of late night revising. Thanks.

Donna's picture

I don't see it as a long lost

I don't see it as a long lost magic but just one that isn't thrust in your face and acts more as a spice for the story as opposed to a heaping pile of ketchup.

If the context of coerced sex and reflecting on his own misdeed, I think it's only then that Temmin realized he did something that was less than regal. He didn't think anything of it then because he always had the power. While I don't think he's the type of boy to see his lessers as less than human, these were people in his employ and as a payment, as asked for a kiss because he felt it was owed to him as an employer. He didn't see the repercussions of his acts and didn't think that the girl was simply saying yes because she had to obey him. Temmin didn't see the difference between someone doing something for him because they wanted to and because they were told to. They were one and the same. He wasn't taught such things growing up because they weren't necessary. Essentially there weren't any repercussions for his actions while he was growing up because his servants were ordered to serve him.

You can't commit a crime if you don't know you're committing it and legally, that statement holds true in court and people are found innocent because of it. I'm sure if the girl screamed and tried to push him off he would have stopped but for all intents and purposes, she complied with the request, leaving him no other logical conclusion except that she wanted it and she said yes. Like someone above said, the boy is more familiar with horses than he is with people so it's no surprise that he didn't pick up on her facial expressions or body language.

JJ's picture

your rating thingie is broken,

your rating thingie is broken, I guiuess that's why no votes.

MeiLin's picture
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I had just installed it last night...

...and I just uninstalled it about 3 minutes ago. I don't have time to screw with broken stuff right now...

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