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Chapter 7 | The Tale of Two Kingdoms

The Tale of Two Kingdoms

Cautions: This chapter is NSFW, rated for adults, and contains non-consensual sex. Don't read it if that bothers you.

Princess Edmerka of Leutefloss was angry, so angry her poor nurse Olka didn't know what to do with her but leave her alone in her room to rage. "I don't want to marry some petty lordling, I don't want to enter the Sister's Temple, I just want to do what I want to do!" she screamed at no one. "I'm tired of being shut up in this place! I want out, Out, OUT!!" The sound of broken crockery followed Olka down the hall.

She ran to the king's chambers and prostrated herself at the feet of King Fredrik. "Begging your pardon, your majesty, but I just don't know what to do any more! The princess is so willful. We try to do everything she asks, but nothing satisfies her! She keeps saying she wants out of the castle!"

King Fredrik pinched the bridge of his aquiline nose and sighed. "Out? What does she mean by that? I've offered to let her join the Sister's Temple if she doesn't mean to marry."

"I believe," said his queen, "she wants to see something of the kingdom other than the view from her window. Isn't that right, Olka?" Olka nodded. Fredrik looked at his pretty young wife, demurely embroidering beside him. "Perhaps, dear," she said, "you should give her what she wants. Send her off somewhere, let her see a bit of the kingdom before she settles down. Surely there's a visit she can make to some noble or other. Perhaps one with an eligible son or two?" She put down her needle and took Fredrik's hand, tracing her fingers on his palm. "All this noise and bother--it makes it difficult for us to concentrate on...things...don't you agree?"

Fredrik did agree indeed, and soon the princess found herself bundled off to her stepmother's family near the western border with Tremont. She rode in a fine carriage, with Olka beside her and a contingent of guards to keep her safe on the two-day journey. "At least she's only sulking," said Olka to the captain of the guards when they stopped for the night at an inn.

But as they came near their destination on the second day, the princess saw smoke rising from a widening in the road. She craned her head out of the carriage window and saw ahead of them a Traveler encampment, its bright caravans in a half-moon around a campfire. "Stop!" she cried. "You will stop at that Traveler camp! I wish to have my fortune told!"

"Oh, your highness, but we're almost to your mother's people!" said Olka.

"She is not my mother and you will stop!" shrieked Edmerka.

The captain of the guard grimaced and called a general halt. Edmerka climbed down from the carriage and swept into the encampment.

An otherwise handsome but cross--eyed young man with rusty hair gave a low bow. "And what would a beautiful young lady like you want with humble Travelers, miss?"

"Everyone knows Travelers can see the future," she said imperiously. "I wish to have my fortune told."

"Are you very sure that's what you wish?" said a creaky old voice from the doorway of a red caravan. Edmerka looked up. It was the oldest crone she'd ever seen, toothless and bent.

"Yes, of course I'm sure!" she answered testily. The old woman beckoned her into the caravan and shut the door, offering the princess a seat at a tiny foldout table attached to the caravan's side.

"Now, my dear," said the old woman, "let's see what the cards say." She took out a battered deck of cards and began laying them out on the rickety little table. "First, your card. Ah, how fitting. The Princess of Fire. Bad--tempered, spoiled, bored and spiteful."

"How dare you!" said Edmerka.

"Oh, I dare in all things, miss, for Travelers have nothing to lose," cackled the old woman. "Shall I continue? Your challenge card: My, my. The Bloody One. Uncontrollable impulses, lasciviousness. The enemy to watch for: The Prince of Water. A ruthless, evil man. The helper to appeal to: The King of Air. Courageous, fierce and loving. Your journey card: The Jailer. Choices taken from you, confinement. The action to take: The Princess of Air. Revenge, aggression, fearlessness. And your outcome: The Lovers. Hm! That's easy. A marriage.

"Well!" finished the crone. "A bumpy road to the altar for you, child! What questions have you for me, eh?"

"An arranged marriage! Is that what you see? Father is going to force me into marrying one of his beastly wife's brothers!"

"I can't rightly say that's what's to be, my girl. I can only point out the path you're walking down." The princess arose in a swirl of skirts and turned to go, her face dark with anger. "Hold, pretty one! You've yet to cross my palm with payment."

Edmerka turned on the old woman and stomped her foot so hard the caravan swayed. "If you think for one moment I'm paying you for that fortune, you are very mistaken!" She climbed out into the encampment.

"You won't pay me?" cried the old woman, clambering after her.

"No!" yelled Edmerka, not even bothering to turn around. "Captain! Prepare to be on our way!"

"Stop!" ordered the old woman, throwing a handful of something acrid on the fire. The flames rose up, and a silver smoke threaded its way quickly through the princess's escort. Every one of them froze but the princess and the Travelers, who gathered menacingly around her.

"I ask you again, girl. Will you pay me?" said the old woman.

"No," the princess repeated stubbornly, though she was frightened.

"I give you one last chance for payment, if not in coin then in kind. Kiss my son, and we'll be quits." The cross--eyed young man gave a smile just one tooth shy of a leer.

Edmerka shuddered in disgust. "Absolutely not!"

The old crone chuckled. "Princess Edmerka--oh, of course I know who you are, child--you are a stubborn girl, and brave in your way. It is your downfall now, and will be your salvation later. For you have insulted the wrong Traveler, my dear! I am the Queen of the Travelers, and one way or another, you will pay!" As the princess stared at her in shock, the woman took on a strange appearance. She was both old and young at once, a withered, screeching crone from one angle, and a beautiful, implacable woman from another.

The Traveler Queen spit in her hand, cupped it, and shouted something through it that Edmerka didn't understand. The captain of the guards came to at once, looking around him wild--eyed and frightened.

"Captain!" cried the princess. "Rally your men and deal with these impudent thieves!"

"Are you talking to me?" said the captain in a shaky voice. "Captain? I don't remember! Who are you? Where is this place?" The captain stumbled backwards, turned and fled in terror.

One by one, the guards all panicked and plunged after him into the woods, knowing only that they had to get away from the encampment as soon as possible and nothing else. Even Olka took off after them, fat legs flying, and Edmerka was left alone with the Travelers.

"And so your payment begins, your highness," said the Traveler Queen.

The Travelers took the carriage, the horses, and the princess's fine clothes. They even took her stockings and her hairpins, leaving her struggling to cover herself with her hands and long hair. "Take everything," she spat, "they're only things, and one day my father will string all of you up before the castle gates for this!"

"A brave and foolish child indeed," said the Traveler Queen, and she threw another handful of herbs on the fire; silvery smoke quickly encircled the princess like a cage, then swirled into her as if her skin were drinking it up. The princess gasped and quaked and felt strange all over.

"This was foreseen long ago, child, but I had no idea I'd enjoy it quite this much," said the Traveler Queen. "Because you would not pay us, not even with a kiss, you shall kiss anyone who wants you from now on--and more than that. Anyone who desires you may have you, and you shall not only be powerless to resist, you shall return their desire."

Indeed, as the spell wove its way into her, Edmerka's brave front began to crumble. There were a dozen Travelers circling her, and she could feel desire for her in all of the men and not a few of the women as if it were her own for them. She began to shake, and then to cry. "I'd rather die," she sobbed. "Just kill me!"

"Kill you?" said the Traveler Prince. "That seems a bit harsh for refusing to pay us, don't you think?" The Travelers all laughed.

"That a princess should be reduced to this! What will become of me?" she cried.

She wept so pathetically that the Traveler Queen finally took pity. "Very well," she said. "I cannot lift the spell, but I can make it a bit easier on you. If you give your maidenhead willingly to my son, I will make you forget who you are. It won't change anything, but perhaps believing yourself to be just an ordinary girl instead of a princess will make it less shameful and easier to bear."

Edmerka reluctantly agreed. The Queen licked her finger, and to the princess's disgust traced a little figure on her hip; it glowed silver and then faded to nothing. The rusty--haired young man took her by the hand to his caravan as the rest of the Travelers hooted. "Hush," she heard the Queen scold behind her, to her surprise. "It's difficult enough for her."

There was little space inside the caravan, and the young man settled on the bed to watch her. She was aware of his eyes, his hands, his breathing. The princess faced him but kept her eyes on the floor.

"My name is Connin. I won't hurt you, I swear," he said.

"I am already wounded beyond healing," she answered shakily. "How willing must I be?"

"Willing enough. Come." Connin took her hand and gently pulled her down beside him. "Don't fight it. Let it take you where it will. I know you feel it inside you--how much I long to touch you."

And she did. It was as if she was the one who longed to touch him, to strip his clothes away and feel his skin against hers, to feel his mouth on her breasts-- "Then be about it, Connin," she said, closing her eyes. "I want to get this over with."

Fingers brushed her curtain of hair back over her shoulders, and traced feather--light along her collarbone. They slipped up her neck to cradle her face. She felt his breath on her face, and then he kissed her. No man had ever kissed her before. His lips were softer than she'd expected, and she leaned into him, wanting more in spite of herself.

"Your cheeks are on fire," Connin mumbled between kisses. "They will burn through my hands."

"I'm ashamed," she gasped as he pulled her closer and moved his mouth to her neck. He gently bit her, and she moaned aloud as he sucked at her skin.

"There's no shame in being enchanted," he answered, pushing her back on the bed. "Though shame is overdue in your life, princess." He stopped any response she might have made with his tongue, pushing it deep into her mouth as he covered her body with his. He unfastened his leggings and tugged up his tunic with one hand, and she felt something hard against her thigh. He ended the kiss. "What do you know about lying with a man?"

"Nothing," she confessed. "I've never--ah!" He was licking and sucking at her nipples. "I've never even seen a man unclothed! Oh!"

"Give me your hand," he said in a low voice. He wrapped her fingers around his length. "That is a man, that's what a man feels like." Edmerka gripped him convulsively, thrilled and nauseated at the same time as he pushed into her fist. It was overwhelming, the hardness in her hand, the smell of him, the beard brushing her breasts--all this unfamiliar maleness.

She wriggled beneath him, not even entirely sure why, or what she hoped would happen. She just knew she had to move, to feel more of him moving against her. She felt lascivious, helpless, horribly alive. When his fingers slipped between her legs she knew what it was her body wanted, and she cried out in want and humiliation.

"Do you feel that, little princess?" he murmured in her ear. "I do. Your sex is dripping for me. Have you ever touched yourself there? No? Here." His thumb brushed against her clitoris. She took in a deep, shocked breath. All of her emotion and sensation condensed in that little spot. He brushed it again, languidly circling it as she clutched at him, at the coverlet, at the air. He chuckled low in his chest and latched onto her nipple, still stroking her.

"What's going to happen? Something--oh--what--oh! Amma! Help me! Ahhh!" Connin pushed a single finger inside her, and Edmerka came for the first time in her life.

"Ah, that was lovely, your highness, so lovely," he growled, pulling his cock out of her hand and centering himself between her legs. "This--will--hurt--for a moment. Aaahhh," and he slowly pushed his way in. She trembled and gasped to feel his hardness inside her, and then cried out when he broke past her maidenhead and buried himself in her completely.

Her flushed face was a perfect war of emotion: Overwhelming, unseemly lust and melting pleasure, fighting pure fear and horror. "Mine, princess," he whispered in her ear, "just this once, you are mine. Then you shall be anyone's." He began thrusting into her then, pinning her beneath him as she bucked and sobbed; he kissed her brutally, taking her cries into his mouth. She moved her hips in time with his, unable to control herself, until she felt the tension build unbearably inside her. She tore her mouth away from his, threw her head back and screamed as the ecstatic pulse flowed through her, stronger than before, and she came.

Connin bellowed in answer, pounding himself into her for his last few thrusts until he collapsed atop her. "Oh, such a gift you've given me, you don't even know it," he panted, but she couldn't hear him. The conflicting emotions had been too much for her; she had passed out completely.

He stroked her cheek regretfully. "I'm sorry for this, little one, but it had to be." Reaching to a shelf above the bed, he took up a tiny vial. He uncorked it and knelt between the princess's legs, gently scraping her maiden blood into the vial and corking it again before he stashed it back up on the shelf.

Connin fastened himself up and jumped down from the caravan. "It's done," he told his mother.

"The horses are hitched, we're ready to move," the Traveler Queen replied. "Let's go."

The Travelers took the road leading away from the princess's former destination until they came to a fork. One road led back to Leutefloss Castle and King Fredrik; the other led deeper into the forest and over the border into Tremont. They took the forest road until they were well inside Tremont's borders, not far from the only cottage for miles. They carried the unconscious girl out of the caravan and laid her in a clearing. And there they left the Princess Edmerka, naked and sleeping in the moonlight.

Temmin pulled back from the book with a start. His blood was pounding in his ears, his trousers felt uncomfortably tight, and his breathing was fast. The sky outside his windows was dark. Above him stood the Teacher, just the same as when the story had begun. "It's time for dinner," the Teacher said.

"Why are you showing me this?" cried Temmin, standing on shaky legs. "Why are you showing me what happened to that unfortunate girl?"

"This is the history of your family, your highness."

"How is rape part of my family's history?!"

"Rape is in the history of every royal family, your highness." The elegant head tilted to one side. "We can end there, if you'd like."

"But what happened to her?" said Temmin, leaning forward. "Who found her?"

"Let me ask you this first," parried the Teacher. "If you found that girl in the forest, knowing nothing of her but that she was naked, beautiful and...enthusiastic--and she knew no more than that, herself--what do you think you'd do?"

Temmin swallowed hard and stared at his Teacher. "I should like to think I'd do the right thing. What happened?"

The Teacher smiled slightly. "I will see you in the morning."

When Jenks came into the study to help Temmin dress for dinner, he found his young charge sprawled on the green velvet sofa, staring moodily into the fire. He hesitated. "Your highness? It's time to change for dinner."

"I know," said Temmin. He was quiet for a moment. "Jenks, would you say I should be proud of my family?"

"Whithorse or Tremont, your highness?" said Jenks cautiously.

"Tremont," he replied.

Jenks paused. "Every family has its skeletons, your highness, especially royal ones."

"That's what Teacher said, after a fashion." Temmin rose from the sofa and ruffled his hair. "Jenks, d'you think I'm a good person? That I'd do the right thing?"

"Of course you are. Of course you would. Your mother raised you to. What's gotten into you, young sir?" He bustled into the bedroom and began pulling clothes out of the wardrobe.

"A story," sighed Temmin, shuffling in after him. "Just a story."

The Intimate History books are drafts. Keep that in mind as you read. A fully edited and revised version of each book will appear beginning in 2010.

Scryer's Gulch stands and falls on its own, a true soap opera. Never look back, never revise, just make shit up to explain those plot holes away! Yeehaw!

Creative Commons LicenseAn Intimate History of the Greater Kingdom and Scryer's Gulch by Lynn Siprelle writing as MeiLin Miranda are licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 United States License.

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Kat's picture

Wow. Just linked over from

Wow. Just linked over from ToMU and read the entire thing... just... wow. This is an amazing story and I hope you can keep it up!!

MeiLin's picture
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me too!

I was telling a friend that I feel like Dickens on speed.

Kitabare's picture

*clearing throat* That was...

*clearing throat* That was... ahem... yeah, if I were Temmin (or a male period) I think my pants would be a bit tight too.

Now I wanna know more. I'm very interested in the Tremont family history now.

MeiLin's picture
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Oh good

because that's pretty much what the story is about. Smiling

Computer Mad Scientist's picture

Regarding squick and Chapter 7

I ignored your warning, and to be honest, the squick that chapter invokes in me is the sort of squick that enhances the story, if that makes sense. I'd have preferred if the first sex in the story wasn't rape, but I certainly don't expect you to compromise the story to make it more palatable(it's a good story regardless of palatability, squick and all). It gives some insight into Teacher's character that this is the first story he chose to tell Temmin at the very least...and what kind of world the over-story takes place in. In other words, I think the squick warning should be a warning to give pause before reading rather than to not read at all.

I'm here from your early MU banner ads, incidentally; I've been lurking since Chapter 1.

MeiLin's picture
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this story-in-story

is where the whole thing began, though this chapter was much, much more condensed originally--just a couple of paragraphs, and no Temmin-Teacher at all. This is the germ of the whole thing, which came to me a couple of years ago. I wrote it in my head, spinning it out just for myself, until last October when this whole weird fiction compulsion started. I read this from Neil Gaiman:

You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it.

...and it was like a mental thunderclap. And I started writing this out in actual words. So blame Gaiman. Or, uh, not. I kinda semi-worship the guy, so I wouldn't want to blame him for all this...

Toad's picture

Neil Gaiman

I've also always loved Mr. Gaiman's writing, since I started his comics as a teenager. I think he'd be happy to know that one more of his fans had started transcribing her daydreams, even if she's not exactly turning a profit from it yet. Smiling

Thank you for sharing your work with us, and I hope you continue to do so for some time to come.

MeiLin's picture
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thank you

so, so much. Smiling

Kit's picture

Wow. I linked from ToMU...

Wow. I linked from ToMU... like a bunch of others... and spent a couple hours catching up.

Yeah, it's safe to say I'm hooked. Excellent story.

MeiLin's picture
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thank you

Please tell your friends, everyone. I'm going to have to seriously cut back on advertising very soon now, and rely more on word-of-mouth. You guys are my word-of-mouth, so if you like the story and want it to continue, spread the word.

Eala's picture

Absolutely fantastic :D

In every sense of the word "fantastic" Eye-wink. I too linked over from ToMU and I am so glad that I did! Your writing is an absolute joy to read.

I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next...

MeiLin's picture
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thanks

I'm glad to see so many of my fellow ToMU fans here. Smiling

Eustacia's picture

I enjoy the story, I'm

I enjoy the story, I'm looking forward to Temmin's charecter growth and maturation, but the sex writing in this chapter kind of sucks, and the bit with the gypsy woman feels very cliche. It was definately predictable, at least, that she'd piss off the gypsy and get cursed. Your style in general felt weaker on the story within the story-- was that intentional to show a difference, or jsut a side product of differnt charecters?

MeiLin's picture
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cliches

are cliche for a reason, but stick around. The Traveler Queen and her son are important to the story--both stories currently under way. Stick with it. Ultimately I don't think you'll find her presence cliche at all. The sex wasn't meant to be scorching. It was meant to be a little awkward. The style of the story in the story was meant to be a bit more fairy-tale-like. Perhaps you'll enjoy the next chapter more.

huehueteot's picture

Cliche????

Man you get a load of critics. And from what I can see the criticism is unmerited. Everybody seems to like what you write and the story, I know I do! Yet nobody seems to be able to understand that you are the "author" and that you have your stile, your pacing and your set of images and "tools" for plot development. I think it was in chapter 5 that someone suggested that you needed to do less narration and instead present the narrative story line with action and detailed description. Particularly this was in reference to Teacher as I remember. I have thought some about that recommendation and I think that critics are those who can't do what you do so they criticize. I like the way you are developing your plot lines and characters and I like the story within a story motif. I don't find it cliched at all in fact I don't even find the elements in the story that predictable. And as the Queen of Travelers said it was foretold! Therefore it was already predicted! Give it a rest critics!

MeiLin's picture
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no, it's good

Actually, most of the comments here have been very positive. I'm not worried about negative ones. I'm an old lady, and I've been writing (though not fiction) a long time. I can take my lumps, but thanks for liking the story. Not everyone is going to, and that's fine.

huehueteot's picture

reply to reply to Cleche????

It never seemed to me that the people that made the negative comments were sincere. Comments were from people that said that they liked the story but... I find that your story carries me away and while I am reading it I am there and the characters are real to me and the events and landscapes are real to me. All the background around me reseeds into nonexistence and I am focused on the story. Not every writer can do that for me and I really appreciate it when they do. For that matter I just noticed that your messages to comments have a very different feel from the story you are telling. From your comments I get a sense of calm centered-ness that I don't find in the story which has a much more gripping effect on me a much more driven sweeping me up and carrying me away kind of effect. Driving to an end that isn't yet visible. And not to say that YOU couldn't improve the story by working it over. Look at what Tolkien did and how long and how much he had to rewrite it. Vision, you have and should keep following it! BTW I am old too.

Eustacia's picture

Dude, man, we can like the

Dude, man, we can like the story and still have constructive criticism and questions. I'm going to assume that Ms. Miranda is a mature enough adult to be able to deal with criticism. Unless she asks us to limit comments to those which are wholly positive, i'm going to continue to be honest.

It's wonderful that these stories have such a great effect on you; just understand that there are those of us who aren't as captivated.

MeiLin's picture
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as long as it's constructive

If you act like a grown-up, I can act like a grown-up. Smiling I don't believe in my own infallibility as a writer, especially with this chest cold. I'm worried that I'll post ch 8 and read it tomorrow and it'll look like

tyjr wiol ntpem gpc kimrf pbrt jr ;scuy foh.

I do know my characters better than anyone else, but there's many a slip twixt keys and clip, or something like that.

PepperBlue's picture

I think

the illiteration of the sex was very accurate to what it would actually be like. Putting in a steamier sceen would have been too much under her circumstances.

Not only am I interested in the Tremont family tree, I am very interested in the history of Teacher. The how and what he teaches his students, I am looking forward to.

Kit's picture

about spreading the word

so I decided I wanted to put one of your banners up on my myspace (yeah I know I'm lame but hey. it works.) and I just wondered how you wanted me to go about that. I'm not much for the technical terms and stuff so I have no idea what you mean when you say don't hotlink.

MeiLin's picture
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lame schmame

If it works for you, it's not lame. Smiling

I'll clarify the instructions on the support page so that normal people (ie, non-techgeeks) can figure it out, but here they are quickly:

Take a copy of the banner yourself. The easiest way to do this is to right-click the banner (control-click on Mac); a menu should come up, and one of the choices will be to copy the graphic. Do that. "Hotlinking" means to use MY copy of the banner on my machine. Please don't do that. If a whole bunch of people do it, it'll overwhelm my server.

Upload it to your myspace however you do that. I can't be much help in that department because I don't have a myspace.

The regular html way to put up a banner linked here involves putting this markup on a page:

<a href="http://www.meilinmiranda.com/intimate-history"><img src="wherever/myspace/puts/your/image" /></a>

I don't know how it works on myspace, though--whether you have to hand-code things in, or what.

Hope this helps!

Kit's picture

it does

mmm it helps a lot, actually, thanks!

Diabolical Furby's picture

Those silly Travelers.

Fairy-tale Romani cursing a pompous geje. A simple enough way to start a fairy-tale if their ever was one. A lovely chapter though I didn't even blink an eye at the rape of the princess, as many published works of fantasy have featured far worse scenario's. Looking forward to the rest of the story-in-story... story. Smiling

TheGrayCrayon's picture

Um... just wondering if you

Um... just wondering if you know about the link at the top of your site. Definitely NSFW. I personally don't care cuz that stuff doesn’t bother me but I just wanted to make sure your ok with that. otherwise can't wait for todays update

MeiLin's picture
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yeah, well...

not my choice of advertiser, and I'm going to go look at that bid. I don't pre-approve ads. It doesn't bother me per se, but I know it might cut into someone else's reading ability. I mean, my ads have a nekkid chick in profile...

ETA: The update is scheduled for tomorrow, Thursday. I'm on the West Coast of the US, -7 GMT. Smiling

TheGrayCrayon's picture

AH tommorrow. yes.

AH tommorrow. yes. understood. got it. i don't feel silly at all. *facepalm*

MeiLin's picture
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no worries

It will probably actually post tonight, my time. I'm just wrapping it up. I have the Cold from Heck and am drinking large pots of oolong, eating oranges and giving my husband pitiful looks as I sit here typing. It's nearly naptime in fact, but I want to get my first draft done before I do and spend the evening going over it.

The Cloaked Stranger's picture

The Teacher

I still find the Teacher the most compelling character, considering he hardly talks. You have to wonder about his motivations, why he teaches this family, how he knows about their history, and why he would choose to start his lessons with this story. I think he's trying to manipulate Temmin, but towards what? We have to wait and see.

Donna's picture

Fans are awesome, for where

Fans are awesome, for where would one be without them but, for me anyway, it irks me to see the diehards jump on any comment that isn't littered with overwhelming praise, especially considering I'm one who likes to offer up constructive criticism when I find it warranted. Doesn't mean I'm shitting on the piece but it doesn't mean I like it any less either. Besides, an author that's only welcoming of positive praise isn't writing for the right reasons.

Anyway, excellent chapter. I've been waiting for the sex! I was kind of bracing myself because I thought I would find the rape scene disturbing but I didn't. Perhaps it was because the princess wasn't tortured enough, or that didn't come through because of the mixed emotions. The thing is, I don't know if I should have been disturbed about it. She was obviously a damn brat and while I don't think deserving is the right word, giving a damn about others would have put her in a better situation.

Honestly, I have to applaud you on this world of yours. While I don't mind the high stuff, I very much like this kind of work as well, the lighter fantasy that isn't dripping in sorcery. In all honesty, one of the WIPs proffers up this type of magic and this type of world. It's a magic that's secondary, that exists in the world but it's subdued, vented through channels other than every person in the world and every piece of it. I love it!

MeiLin's picture
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Hi Donna!

Good to see you back. Smiling I would encourage fans not to jump on negative comments; as I said above, I'm a grown-up girl. And thanks for the praise, from you that definitely means something.

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