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Chapter 48 | The Queen Who Ruled by Herself

Badly Healed Wounds

Ellika was unnaturally glum as she followed Glaes through the wards, though she tried to be good. They went to any patient who called to them, and did as Glaes had said they would. Ellika dutifully read letters and books to some, wrote letters for others, smiled charmingly at everyone no matter how putrid, and even held a few hands. But she drew the line at kissing anyone. “I don’t care how lonely they are,” she said firmly.

“Very well,” said Glaes, leading Ellika up the broad flight of stairs to the third floor. “Your presence alone cheers them up, your highness.”

“Because I’m a princess?”

“Because you’re a pretty young girl smiling at them,” answered Glaes with a chuckle. “Most of them don’t know who you are. You surprise me that you’ve done this much this graciously. I thought you would put up more of a fight.”

“Ah, well,” sighed Ellika, smoothing out her plain striped dress. “This is at once harder than I thought it would be and easier.” Glaes prompted her with a questioning brow. “Well, I mean, I don’t like sick people. I don’t like being around sick people. I don’t want to be here, at all. But knowing I have to be here and I can’t get out of it--well, one just does what one has to do. Then one can get through it and go do something one likes.”

“Just so,” said Glaes.

“You don’t like this either?” said Ellika.

Glaes laughed softly. “When I first became a postulant, I hated it. Absolutely hated it. But now it’s my favorite duty.”

“Why?” said Ellika, genuinely curious.

“Because no house needs the touch of the Lovers more than the Healer’s House. Here, even the littlest care you show someone has immediate benefit. We do more good here than anywhere else, I believe.” Glaes opened the wide swinging doors to the fourth ward. “I trust you can get through this ward on your own. I will go next door to the third ward. When you’re finished, come find me.”

Ellika walked into the high-ceilinged room, her footsteps echoing slightly. Was anyone actually in this ward? Most of the curtained-off beds were empty; the few patients were fast asleep. They were to a person swaddled in bandages and plaster. This must be where the most severely injured were brought, she thought.
Finally, at the back of the ward, she saw a young man in the soft cotton trousers and shirt in which the Healer’s House clothed the male petitioners. The young man was sitting up in a chair beside his bed, with a laprobe over his legs; he looked spindly, a good-sized man who’d apparently had a long convalescence. His nose was crooked, but he was rather handsome in an unaristocratic way. His hair was a dark reddish-brown, and he was dusted with freckles. He reminded her of someone, but she couldn’t place who; in fact, he looked positively familiar.

The young man looked up. His eyes were a soft blue; they opened wide when he saw her, as if startled. But he quickly schooled his face into a neutral, almost hostile expression. “Yes?” he said.

Ellika lifted her brows, but gave him her best sympathetic smile. “I’m here as a devotee of the Lovers,” she began.

“Where’s Glaes Beloved?”

“She’s in another ward. My name is Ellika--”

“I know who you are, your highness,” he bit out.

“Oh! Well,” said Ellika uncertainly. Never in her life had anyone not been glad to see her--or at least, never in her life had anyone made it that obvious. “I--is there anything you need, anything I can do for you? Do you have any letters you need read to you, or letters you need written for you?”

“Thank you for your concern, ma’am,” he said sardonically. “But as it happens, I am a university student. I realize the nobility prefers its underclasses illiterate. I’m so very sorry to disappoint.”

Ellika looked as if he’d slapped her. “I do beg your pardon, sir!” she said stiffly, turning to leave.

The young man winced and reached out, tugging at her skirts. “Please, forgive me,” he said humbly. “Please don’t go.” She turned around reluctantly and clasped her hands in front of her, her mouth set in a pretty little line. “I’m sorry. You didn’t deserve that, but I don’t feel terribly well today and it makes me cross. Please,” he said, beginning to struggle to his feet, “take the chair and I’ll go back to bed.”

“Nonsense,” Ellika said briskly, surprising herself; her tone was exactly that of her old Nurse. Where had that come from? “Nonsense,” she repeated, pushing him gently but firmly back into the chair. “You’re staying where you are. It’s your chair. I can make myself quite comfortable here,” she said, perching on the edge of his pallet and adding conspiratorially, “as long as you don’t tell stories about having a princess in your bed.” That had the usual, desired effect; he blushed and smiled up at her, and she sat back in satisfaction. “Now, then, let’s begin again. I’m Ellika. What’s your name?”

“Bernid Wallek,” he said, extending his hand.

She took it in her own and gave it a gentle shake. “Mr Wallek, I’m very glad to meet you,” she said. “Now, tell me how you came to be here.”

When Temmin returned to his rooms after lunch, he’d almost expected the Teacher not to be there. His tutor had been extremely upset, and perhaps embarrassed by that display of emotion; Temmin never could read what was going on behind those gray eyes.

But silhouetted against the windows was the now-familiar black figure, and his relief at the sight surprised him. “For a moment, I thought you might not be coming back,” Temmin said tentatively.

“What?” said the Teacher, turning back from the windows. “Whyever wouldn’t I?”

“Well! You seemed rather--disturbed,” he said, sliding into his library chair.

“I was rather disturbed, but that’s hardly a reason to interrupt our lessons. Are you ready to work?”

“If you are,” said Temmin with a little frown. He picked up the book and opened it.

Macca did not take to motherhood easily. Her long labor left her weak and feverish; there were moments the Eldest Sister worried the queen would not pull through. By the time Macca was well enough to sit up and take note of the world, her milk had dried up, and so the baby stayed with the wet nurse.

She did her best to be a good mother even so. She saw the baby as often as she could, but to her sadness, Creith vastly preferred his nurse and screamed inconsolably in Macca’s arms until he was given back. Even when he was weaned, he still was afraid of his mother. “Creith!” Macca would coax. “Come see Mama!” But the little boy would shake his head stubbornly and hide behind his nanny.

And in truth, Macca was nearly a stranger to her son. Running the country was time-consuming; she saw to most of the decision-making herself. Macca could trust very few people. She relied most heavily on Mihall Lord Valmouth. Macca had kept her word, and Mihall had been allowed to court and marry Nowa. Nowa continued on as Macca’s closest confidant, and Mihall helped her negotiate the political landscape. While the nobility had rallied to Ilhovin’s side, not all of them were happy to see his foreign wife as regent, and there was open grumblings.

Lord Kellen was the first to test her. He saw fit to reduce the crown’s due on the coal tax from twelve coppers per ton to six, keeping the other six for himself. She sent her troops to Kellen to convince his lordship that though he’d been loyal during the revolt against Ilhovin, she was serious about being regent; he would obey her. The sight of the Tremontine army ringing his capital of Greenvale, Lord Valmouth at its head, convinced Lord Kellen that in fact he’d meant that the crown’s due was thirteen coppers, not six, nor even twelve.

Macca chose to exercise her power in her own life, as well. Not long after she recovered from Creith’s birth, she went through the royal tack rooms with her riding master. She looked over the carefully oiled and polished sidesaddles, their jewels and fine metal winking in the low light. “All of these,” she said. “I want the gems pried loose, the gold and silver removed, and then I want them burned. You will call me when you are ready to set them ablaze.”

“Burned?” said the riding master in astonishment. “Your majesty, how will you ride?”

“Like a human being!” she called over her shoulder as she returned to the Keep. She took her old divided riding skirts out of storage and had them copied in a more modern Tremontine style, in more sumptuous fabrics. And when the pile of stripped-down sidesaddles was ready, she lit the fire herself and watched it burn until there was nothing but coals. The women of Tremont embraced the Sairish riding style fervently, despite the disapproval of the Little Father, the Little Mother, the Eldest Brother and the Eldest Sister, who declared that riding astride could not be good for a woman’s fertility. Macca and the Tremontine women ignored them, and rode as they pleased.

Tremont’s neighbors were more than eager to test the Regent. The Northern Tribes pushed south deep into Tremont, but when she tried to raise an army big enough to retake the territory, she was rebuffed. “Your majesty,” said Lord Whithorse when she called him to the Keep, “you cannot expect the nobility to raise armies for you whenevery you ask us to. To do so is to strip our treasuries.”

“You’re right,” said Macca. “I should expect to do it from my own treasury. I’ll just have to raise taxes on the landed classes to raise my army.”

“I’m sorry?” said Lord Whithorse in alarm.

“I said,” she repeated sweetly, “I shall have to raise taxes on the landed classes. That includes you, my lord. If the nobility will not spend their own treasuries, I shall simply make mine larger,” she added as she left the room.

“We’ll be happy to collect it for you as always,” called Whithorse.

“And have you pocket half of it? Never worry, I shall take care of it,” she returned.

The queen sent Mihall to the Father’s Temple with a large contribution. He came back with a battalion of Fathers to be used once a year for ten years as tax collectors. Macca raised 14 million gold in taxes, and raised a standing army of her own, the first permanent army the kingdom had ever had without relying on the nobility.

More than once Macca looked up at the old tower where she’d banished the Teacher, and wished for advice--but no. She couldn’t trust her husband’s betrayer, ever again.

Temmin came to; the sun was still high. “Get something to eat. I’ll be back after tea,” said Teacher shortly. “I want to get through this today.”

Temmin watched the black robe flow through the door, then sighed. When Jenks came in with his tea and his post, Temmin said, “Jenks, who founded the royal armies?”

Jenks blinked in surprise. “The cavalry and infantry? Tremont didn’t have its own standing army until 638. Harsin the Third founded it.”

“Harsin the Third was six in 638.”

Jenks shrugged. “And you were the Duke of Whithorse at age four, your highness, at which point you added private bathrooms to the residential wing of the great house. Or rather, your mother did in your name. Why, sir?”

“Well, who did it for Harsin the Third, then?”

“What is that bat teaching you, sir? The Coucil of Regents, of course,” said Jenks, shaking his head. “Now, eat something. I worry that Temple isn’t feeding you right, you asking silly questions like that.”

The Intimate History books are drafts. Keep that in mind as you read. A fully edited and revised version of each book will appear beginning in 2010.

Scryer's Gulch stands and falls on its own, a true soap opera. Never look back, never revise, just make shit up to explain those plot holes away! Yeehaw!

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V's picture
Embodiment

Splendid, Jenks

Of course, the Council of Regents (presumably nobles) was sure to come up with a nifty idea that takes real power out of their hands and shifts it to a little kingling. I've probably swallowed a few lies that sketchy without inspection, but this one sure seems to jump out at the reader Smiling Nice chapter. I'm thinking of opening a betting line on whether MeiLin shares Bernid's revelations in the next chapter or two or plays hard-to-get.

Wow! Sarcasm! That's original!

MeiLin's picture
Most High

*whistling*

la la la-la...

The Vixen's picture
Devotee

lmao, well said V.

lmao, well said V.

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lis's picture

I adore MeLin

You are brilliant. Your writing keeps getting better and better, the story as well. I can't wait to see what happens to Ellika now that she's met the very serious Mr. Wallek. Whom I adore. Already. Who doesn't love University boys? Smiling

MeiLin's picture
Most High

I adore you :)

And that's the truth. I adore all my readers. We've met Bern before, remember. He's Fen's brother.

ZestyJester's picture

Yeah, didn't Tem's guards

Yeah, didn't Tem's guards beat the.. er.. snot out of him? What chapter was that?

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teehee's picture
Devotee

This is an interesting turn of events

I wondered when we would see Wallek the Elder again. This level of organization is beyond me; I can't even keep my school schedule straight! I enjoy the chapters that we get to see a little bit of everybody, and anything involving the Temple is fine by me Sticking out tongue

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lis's picture

Kinda dying inside waiting for the next installment.

I remembered the earlier introduction, I just didn't expect him to re-enter the story in such a wonderfully perfect, and serendipitous, way.

Also, Macca reminds me of my mother. They are (quiet obviously) in very different circumstances, but their personalities are very similar, as well as their reactions and physical appearance—which is based merely on written descriptions and speculation. Hopefully Alice can be put to the task soon (hint hint nudge nudge wink wink blatant request) so I’ll know for sure.

SongCoyote's picture
Devotee

Ah, how history is rewritten....

History is rewritten by those who come after, and not just by the victors: by the ruling class, by the patriachy or matriarcy, by clerks whose pockets have been lined, by those with an interest in assuring that their perception (or desired perception) of what happened becomes what is accepted as fact.

This is why I appreciate the few teachers who depart from standard textbooks and teach from apocrypha, original ephemera, and other actual extant evidience so that students can see how very confused most major events were. Many of the things we quote regularly as part of the world's history most likely didn't occur quite the way they are depicted - and in many cases not really at all as the stories are told nowadays.

Seeing this in action, as it were, is always fascinating. Thanks again for such great stuff!

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

N's picture

I Hope...

I hope Temmin places Macca back in the history books when he is king, she deserves to be known for what she has done, even if it was unpleasent.

Gudy's picture
Embodiment

I think he might do that, too.

Temmin seems to be big on justice, and rather more... egalitarian than most of Tremontine society.

Bernid and Elly? That has all kinds of potential for mischief, interesting situations and Learning Opportunities for everyone involved. Laughing out loud

Also, Teacher seems to be in an understandable hurry to get this story finished and over with. Does that mean book 2 is drawing to a close as well?

Oddfish's picture
Devotee

This made me think

Here's a possibility: Elly introduces Fen's brother to Temmin, and after the flurry of awkward because Fen can be a right spaz sometimes, King!Temmin commissions him to write a history of Tremont. A real history of Tremont, like this without the very personal bits about the royal family. The truth is revealed, hopefully Fen's brother feels better about society in general, and perhaps Teacher is involved in some capacity?

'Course this thing is not mine, and I'm just pointlessly speculating because I like to do that, so...

ZestyJester's picture

Whenever I see a new chapter..

I'm all sorts of conflicted.. See there's the "Yes! New chapter!" sort of thing going on, and shortly afterwards when I'm done reading it turns into a sort of petulant "Awe, man! Now i gotta wait for another one. :("

In this one the thing that got to me the most wasn't the exchange between Wallek and Ellika or even Temmin and Jenks, but just Macca. How it must have hurt that her baby boy was afraid of her... or not really afraid, but didn't want to be near her. That had to kill her a little inside. People were coming at her from all sides, trying to find her weaknesses and here she is with a little one, the only real thing that connects her to Illhoven, that she's basically isolated from. Someone else said in the comments of the.. ellika/jenks bonus story that kids need parents, but parents need their kids too, and it's true! Anyhow...I don't know exactly what I'm trying to say here, besides that it touched me.

As an accomplished Lurker, it feels really odd to be trying to find something to say actually. I really want to show my support for something that you don't have to be doing Mei! But you are, and I for one appreciate the effort. Since chapter six of book one! Wait.. that reads wrong. I've been reading since then, not that you.. blargh..
See? Bad things happen when the Jester tries to talk, mainly run-on sentances Sticking out tongue You should see me at slapstick.. it's really my forte.

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Enid's picture
Devotee

hehe

Run-on sentences can be lots of fun!

And as am no mother, I don't understand the bits about being hurt that your child doesn't want to be near you. I can, however, wholly relate to watching the last bit of the one you love slowly moving further and further away, feeling those last threads connecting you slowly tearing.

My, but that was a bit morbid >.>

Also! Yes! Three cheers for MeiLin! I can be having the crappiest day possible, and then tada! new chapter up and it's like Christmas!! <3

"I have heard the languages of the apocalypse, and now I shall embrace the silence" from Neil Gaiman's "The Sandman: Endless Nights"

NorthwoodsMan's picture
Embodiment

messages...

Last time Bern tried to talk to Temmin and Ellie, he got the snot kicked out of him. Maybe he’ll use this as an opportunity to get his message across. Or use Ellie to get his message to Temmin.

PETA = People Eating Tasty Animals

A failure to plan on your part does not constitute an emergency on my part.

kalinka's picture
Devotee

Sleeep...

I tried to stay up last night to wait for this, but I had to drive 10 hours to get back from Thanksgiving and it just wasn't happening. Had I managed it, however, this chapter would have been worth it! I loved it. Usually I'm not a massive fan of Ellika, but I have a feeling in the near future she's going to grow on me. And I hope that Temmin does put Macca back in the history books, she completely deserves it.

*sigh* Can't wait for Tuesday's chapter. Smiling

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Stormy's picture
Postulant

You are officially last

I see a new chapter on my feed list and let my anticipation grow as I work through everything else before rewarding myself with IHGK. It's like dessert! Save the best and all that.

Thank you for sharing your incredible gift with us. Oh, and it's the first...time to go donate. Whee!

Ely's picture
Petitioner

bedtime story...

Me too ! It's been a while since I noticed I was keeping the History for last, because I knew it was going to bring me a smile. Or a sigh. Or both, for that matter.
It wouldn't do to be in a hurry, but sometimes it's really hard to know there's a new chapter and yet to wait for the following evening. It's a great read in bed, with the laptop on the floor and everything ready for the night =)

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"The slow movement seems, somehow, to say much more."

Clare-Dragonfly's picture
Postulant

Hah!

I do the same thing! Apparently that's a popular choice.

I liked this chapter (of course). I was expecting Ellika to run into the other Mr. Wallek. Look forward to seeing what happens with that.

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Capriox's picture
Embodiment

Argh! You darn well *better*

Argh! You darn well *better* let us know how Bernard's explanation to Ellika goes, or else... *grumblegrumblethreatengrumble*. I really really hope he tells her the truth, and then I hope we get to see Ellika bring it up at the family breakfast or something. Oooooh... delicious.

Also, that last interchange where Temmin probes Jenks (my goodness, the boy might learn subtlety after all?) = MAJOR WIN.

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Andrea's picture
Postulant

Yay! The other Wallek! *hums

Yay! The other Wallek! *hums happily* It looks like the Lovers' lifestyle will do Ellika some good after all.

I feel bad for Teacher in the History, but I'm glad he wants to get through this part "today."

Ladyinahat's picture

Hehe I am wondering just how much T.R.O.U.B.L.E. that

Ellika and Bernad are going to get into!!! I can see the fun times are coming!

Awesome Chapter!

Serena's picture

I would really love to see

...Temmin and Sedra comparing notes regarding The Book, and how to run a country. I'll bet she'd have a different answer than Jenks if asked the same question.

Arcer26's picture

Ha!

It would serve Ellika right if she went and fell in love with a commoner. Though I actually quite like her; I don't want her to love someone she can't marry and then be unhappy. Just think it would be funny and ironic.

Elle's picture
Petitioner

But

The Walleks used to be a noble house (i'm assuming from Macca's story and from Fen's reaction to Temmin's question about his last name) and possibly were noble recently (as in within a generation). There could be some serious twist resulting in these two actually being noble and just in hiding or something equally sneaky Smiling

teehee's picture
Devotee

Makes sense.

And, your icon made me LOL, srsly.

XD

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Elle's picture
Petitioner

lol

thanks! that was my reaction when i stumbled on it a few months ago Smiling

Gudy's picture
Embodiment

Not if Fen told the truth...

... and I don't think he was actively lying at this point.

Remember, Fen said something about his great-grandfather going on about how a royal favor was taken away from the family centuries ago. If both Fen and his granddad are right, that means the Walleks can't have been the Dukes of Valmouth for more than a couple of decades, beginning in 632 KY, and haven't been noble for a good long while.

Elle's picture
Petitioner

hmmm...

That would make a claim of noble blood much shakier. You'd probably need at least two generations landed in order to consider yourself a descendent (judging by our standards...things might be different here). BUT it could still be done. (I'm clinging rather fondly to this hypothesis; huge fan of A Knight's Tale. And I should probably head to bed now, as I just used the word hypothesis in a friendly conversation Eye-wink )

Nye's picture
Supplicant

Lovely

I had a good laugh several times through this chapter. Macca seems to have a much better head on her shoulders than most of the kings Teacher advised did. Likes her revenge quite a lot, though. Of course I burned my PE clothes in effigy once I never needed them again.... in quite the spectacular fashion. *cough*

"A gift of the spirits is in equal parts a curse." -AK

Epikouros's picture

Ah, Jenks

So we see Bernid again! Very interesting. I wonder if Macca knew what she had wrought by creating a standing army ... and what that army looked like.

As for "history is written by the victors," remember that its also often written by losers mulling over their defeat (see Thucydides or the flurry of German memoirs after 1945). But with an old and stable dynasty in Tremont, and history still a hobby for the well-to-do, I expect that the official view has a lot of weight behind it.

TheBoy's picture
Embodiment

--which-- history?

Lots of people write history.

Winners' history becomes fact more readily.

It's supposed to be a challenge, that's why they call it a shortcut. If it was easy it would just be the way.
--Road Trip
"Funny. Terrible, but funny." (that's typically my aim)
-NorthwoodsMan

Epikouros's picture

Really? Do most people today

Really? Do most people today see the Siege of Constantinople in 1453 from the Turkish perspective, or the Roman? Did the Confederate perspective on the American Civil War vanish in the decades after 1865? Today there are whole academic industries to defend anyone who appears to be the victim of biased sources. When only one view survives, its usually because one side was illiterate, because very few sources at all survive, or because a very powerful establishment manages to control what gets written (and, thankfully, that's harder to do than it sounds like).

Sorry- this is one of my pet peeves, along with the idea that history is just about learning facts.

TheBoy's picture
Embodiment

a) we'll specify Long-term

a) we'll specify Long-term winners, and
b) note that I said "more readily."
I think that the Union perspective on the Civil War is more prevalent (even here in border-Confederacy where I live) than Confederate perspective, though it's not as bad as my (in the north) HS History teacher who made reference to "when we won the Civil War."

It's supposed to be a challenge, that's why they call it a shortcut. If it was easy it would just be the way.
--Road Trip
"Funny. Terrible, but funny." (that's typically my aim)
-NorthwoodsMan

blwinteler's picture
Supplicant

Being there

The part about just being there helping the sick and injured really touched me. That is the main part of my job. Today, I spoke with a man who had lost his wife of 56 years just a couple months ago. He told me so much about her, about them, and I could hear the anguish in his voice. At the end of the conversation, he told me I helped him a lot by letting him speak his grief. I was in tears for a while, and I am again just recalling it. It really is amazing what good can be done by just being a friendly face or voice. I am glad Ellika is learning this. It is one of the best things for her. It is something so many people could do with learning. And Meilin, you have really put it very beautifully, as always.

A's picture
Postulant

oh, ebil Mei is ebil

Not one, but two, TWO cliffhangers!

I wonder again how often Teacher has had to retell this story...it doesn't seem to get much easier over time...

Heterosexuality is not normal, it's just common. --Dorothy Parker

V's picture
Embodiment

Ebil, yes

But what's the second cliffhanger? The only one I see is Ellika hearing Bernid's story...Macca and Teacher is more of just an open-ended plot thread

Wow! Sarcasm! That's original!

ZestyJester's picture

A suggestion..

I didn't know where else i might put this.. and as i was just reading this chapter, and this is where it occurred to me, this is a good a place as any. I hope.

I was just wondering if it would be possible to put some Next Chapter/Previous Chapter buttons underneath the comments. Cause there's a lotta people jawin down here Laughing out loud

heh.. apparently using carrots instead of parenthesis is not good >.<

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MeiLin's picture
Most High

I would love to

...and in fact have been trying to, but can't figure out how to get Drupal to listen to me on this point. Smiling

V's picture
Embodiment

That avatar

is awesome. Evil

Wow! Sarcasm! That's original!

Zebatinsky's picture

was/were

MeiLin wrote:

And in truth, Macca was nearly a stranger to her son. Running the country was time-consuming; she saw to most of the decision-making herself. Macca could trust very few people. She relied most heavily on Mihall Lord Valmouth. Macca had kept her word, and Mihall had been allowed to court and marry Nowa. Nowa continued on as Macca’s closest confidant, and Mihall helped her negotiate the political landscape. While the nobility had rallied to Ilhovin’s side, not all of them were happy to see his foreign wife as regent, and there was open grumblings.

Last sentence, "...there was open grumblings." should be "...there were open grumblings."

TheBoy's picture
Embodiment

alternatively

Or, "there was open grumbling."

It's supposed to be a challenge, that's why they call it a shortcut. If it was easy it would just be the way.
--Road Trip
"Funny. Terrible, but funny." (that's typically my aim)
-NorthwoodsMan

NorthwoodsMan's picture
Embodiment

prophecy...

Hmmm... I've been thinking about this and now that book two had ended I came back and reread. Macca never took Creith to the Traveler Queen to have his prophecy told.

PETA = People Eating Tasty Animals

A failure to plan on your part does not constitute an emergency on my part.

MeiLin's picture
Most High

just because I didn't write about it

...didn't mean it didn't happen. His prophecy was not germane to this story.

LlubNek's picture

Nitpickery

'While the nobility had rallied to Ilhovin’s side, not all of them were happy to see his foreign wife as regent, and there was open grumblings.'

'were', not 'was', since 'open grumblings' is plural

'While the nobility had rallied to Ilhovin’s side, not all of them were happy to see his foreign wife as regent, and there was open grumblings.'

LlubNek's picture

umm... that second one should

umm... that second one should be

'While the nobility had rallied to Ilhovin’s side, not all of them were happy to see his foreign wife as regent, and there were open grumblings.'

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