Chapter 23 | The Queen Who Ruled by Herself

To Love a Goddess

Outside in the garden, the cheers and chanting of Temmin's name were just subsiding. People were going home to emulate the Gods in their own gardens and fields, partnering up and disappearing into the many hidden corners of the Temple gardens, or simply dispensing with clothing and modesty and calling down the blessing right where they were.

Inside the Chambers, all was still. Temmin was lightheaded and floating on the light radiating from the Twins; it was a bit like when he'd breathed in too much of the incense smoke earlier, but he was more present, more sure of himself, and completely trusting. He felt so good, he wondered vaguely if it was a spell of some kind, but then Neya took his hands and led him to the low, wide bed in the middle of the Chambers, and he thought of nothing but his hands in Hers and how badly he wanted to please Her.

"This is a night of secrets," She said. "You will not speak of this night, ever, to anyone, about what happens in this bed, and you will share the blessings you receive in this bed in Our service for two years. Do you agree?"

"Yes, of course, Lady," said the dazed Temmin.

Neya smiled and kissed his hands almost wistfully. "Mortals when they're young--Brother, there is no creature sweeter. So agreeable and pliant. Now," She said, looking up at Temmin seriously, "show Me what you know about women."

Temmin looked down into Her eyes, and in them he first saw Mattie, unwilling and tear-stained. He frowned, and the image changed to Arta, willing but uncertain. Then came Ellika, forbidden and teasing. Bessa, needing a firm hand to find her comfort. Anda, voluptuous and gleefully forthright. Allis herself, knowing and wistful. "I'm not sure I know anything about women--the women I know are all different." His eyes teared up; he would disappoint Her, he thought fuzzily, he knew nothing. "I'm sorry."

Neya smiled; the clouds in his heart parted and the sun shone again. "Wise little one, that's the first thing one must learn about women. Lie down and you will learn another secret." He quickly stretched out on his back on the bed. "Are you ready?" She asked. Temmin didn't trust his voice not to squeak, and so he just nodded. "Then learn the secret taste of a Goddess." Straddling his head, She lowered herself down until Her folds were the boundaries of his world.

Her first taste was of the ocean, salty and clean. He felt the water all around him and lapped at it, searching for its source. The next taste was of the earth, of loam, rich and dark, and of green things growing. A bitterness arose, herbal and strong, but as he licked it turned to honey, thick on his tongue and flowing from Her. He let out a muffled moan and drew every bit of Her he could reach into his mouth.

There was no time, there was no place, there was only Her--until a mouth enveloped his cock, and there was also Him. Temmin had forgotten all about Nerr, but he remembered now as the God's tongue worked its way around the head. "It's too much, it's too soon, I won't last," he thought frantically.

Neya shifted slightly, and he immediately focused once again on the taste and smell of her, his worries forgotten. How could he be worried about anything when he was doing this? He took as deep a breath as he could; She was roses and sandalwood. Suddenly he caught the scent of the broom that grew around Whithorse and the herbs that Jebby crushed under his hooves as they rode, and his heart swelled with his love for his home. He loved the Lady above him, he loved the Lord between his legs, he loved his land, he loved his people, he loved the world; the flood of love pulsed through him until it burst out from every pore, a gushing of ecstasy that left him blind and deaf but for the rushing of his blood.

Temmin's first thought when he recovered was that he'd come too soon, that They would be angry with him. His second thought was that Neya was lying next to him, stroking his chest. His third thought was that judging by Nerr's hand on him, he was still hard, and not in the least bit damp. His fourth thought, the last before he opened his eyes, was that someone was licking his face--no, two someones were licking his face, delicately cleaning him off. When he opened his eyes, They had finished and were now languorously kissing each other above him.

Neya looked down and gave him a lazy smile. "Now you get a reward. Ask Me any question you'd like. Anything. And I will answer you truly."

Temmin tried to think, but he could barely string two concepts together. "Did I please you?" he finally said muzzily.

Neya stared at him; Nerr burst out laughing. "A chance to ask a God any question, and you ask that!" He whooped. "No wonder this Embodiment calls you 'puppy!'"

"Did I ask the wrong question?" he said, struggling to his elbows.

"That's two questions," said Neya archly. "To answer your first, yes. Your technique needs work. But your eagerness to please Me made up for your lack of finesse. These Embodiments and their servants will teach you, and in time you will have a very talented tongue, little Prince."

"That's good," he said, shaking his head to clear it. "That's good...what just happened? I came but I didn't--oh, is that a question?"

"An undestandable one," said Nerr, squeezing him at the root until his eyes fluttered in reflex. "You will always be ready for Us when you are with Us. We won't allow you to spend, but We will allow you to release. If We didn't, you wouldn't be able to bear being with Us. Your consciousness would fly apart, join the infinite, and your body would be left with no one inside."

"So that's what happened--I almost joined the infinite? Oh, I'm sorry, another question," Temmin winced.

"You may ask questions," answered Nerr. "We might not answer, and We might not tell you everything even if We do. We might even lie, unless We reward you with an answer. Then We will always tell the truth."

"I have had enough of questions, truthfully answered or no," said Neya dismissively. "I wish to enjoy Our gift. Hold him for Me."

"Gladly, though I hardly think he's trying to get away, Sister." Nerr slipped behind Temmin, propping him up on the bed with His arms around Temmin's waist. He stroked Temmin's length until the prince rolled his head back against the God's broad shoulder.

"Pay attention," said Neya, pinching his nipple. He brought his head up with a start. "Better." She straddled his lap, and brought his hands to her breasts.

They were heavy and full, perfect in his hands as he'd always known they would be, and a knife of awareness cut through his arousal; this was not Allis. He was touching Allis's body, but She wasn't Allis. And he'd wanted his first to be her. "I am Allis," She said. "But I am every woman who desires a man. Of course I know your thoughts, little mortal, I am a Goddess. Allis is far away, and I am in control. But she feels this, and she will remember this. We are both your first. And you will have her many times before your time together is through. Now, please Me."

She shifted, bringing Her breasts closer to his face, and he ran his tongue around each nipple before taking one into his mouth. She tasted of flowers, like the honeysuckle he would pluck off the walls of the stable and eat with Alvo back home on lazy summer evenings, the sunlight still slanting low among the trees. Why would such a thing come to mind? he thought dimly as he suckled. "Everything you've ever loved, every person, every place," She whispered, "everyone and everything you've ever wanted, I am all of that. I am the fulfillment of desire."

Temmin gave himself over then, losing himself in the feel of Her hair and skin. His lips found Hers, and he kissed Her deeply, his tongue reaching for every secret he could coax from Her mouth. He broke the kiss and gasped; Nerr had reached between them and was guiding his cock inside Her. He felt the head at her entrance, and then She was on him, impaled to the root.

She was hot and wet, yes. He knew that women were hot and wet inside from his limited experiences with Anda and Bessa. But this was differerent. This was perfect. This was a wetness he would happily drown in, a heat he would gleefully burn in. She fit around him as if he'd been made for Her, and he wondered if he had been.

He cried out as the ecstasy began to flood him again--oh dear, so soon? he thought--and when he returned fully, She was still in his lap, riding him with long strokes.

"That's nothing," She said. "When We finally let you go, you will know what it is to love a God!" She threw Her head back and let out a long scream of pleasure, and he felt Her pulsing all around his cock. She never stopped moving, riding him and coming over and over but never letting him fully release. He didn't care. All he wanted was to please Her, to feel himself sheathed inside Her and laugh with happiness with every ripple that moved through Her. He had no sense of time and didn't care to have one ever again.

Nerr's fingers circled the base of Temmin's cock, drenched with His Sister's wetness. "I feel you, Prince, I feel your heart beating through your skin," He whispered, nipping at Temmin's ear. He could feel the God's own erection pressed against his ass, and the God's fingers alongside. "Wrong angle, Supplicant, and wrong night. Perhaps next spoke, hey?"

Suddenly Neya rose up on Her knees, releasing him. Temmin shuddered with longing, and the warm air against his suddenly exposed cock felt icy cold. She lay back on the bed, lifting Her arms and legs in invitation. "There is an old, old ritual, back before the first of your line, Prince Temmin, before your namesake was ever thought of. Your people don't remember it. But you do. Inside you, it lives, and I have been waiting so long for your line to return to Me. Bring down the blessing on your land. I am the field, you are the plow."

Temmin fell on Her, covering Her body with his own and sliding back inside Her with a grunt. "Lady!" he groaned into Her hair. That deep, earthy smell came to him again, and as he worked inside her it sprouted into green tendrils that curled around him, holding him close to Her and twining around his root. The green burst into bloom, simple, homely flowers at first-- honeysuckle, pinks, sweet peas that made him think of Whithorse again. Then came white roses and gardenias, freesias and tuberose, the scent of the incense in Allis's ordeal. He remembered her suffering, and he wept as he kissed Her. With his tears, the blooms ripened into fruits, apples, pears and berries, and some whose names he didn't know.

"Well done, my king, well done," She sighed, close to some final crisis.

"I'm not the king, Lady," he answered.

"You will be. Look at Me, Temmin." He gazed into the green of Her eyes again. The fruit began to rot, and the smell of dry leaves filled his nose. Figures reappeared in her fathomless eyes. He saw his father on a battlefield, Sedra shielding a child, Ellika facing down Tremontine soldiers, Jenks galloping across the rolling hills of Whithorse with his cavalry sword in his hand, Ansella bloody-handed and in tears, and finally the Teacher and the Traveler Queen, wreathed in flames.

"What's going to happen, Lady?" he asked with his last bit of control.

"You will happen. You will choose to be either Temmin the Liberator or Temmin the Magnificent."

"This--this is the blessing?" he cried as he felt Her close in on him, pulling him into the ecstasy again.

"Yes!" She answered. "Don't be afraid, Temmin! Take it! It's yours, take it!"

Temmin let out a long roar, plunging into Her as he took the release They finally offered.

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V's picture

. . .

OK, that took the words out of my mouth. More once I've had a chance to digest. Wow...sweeping, immersive, and very, very portentous. Temmin the Liberator or Temmin the Magnificent. Beautiful imagery throughout.

balunr's picture

Whoa

I can see why this was such a hard chapter to write! Well done. I have more questions than I did before I read it. Which, I'm sure, was the intention. Eye-wink

NoodletwigMeow's picture

@____@

... coherent thoughts to come later.

Willow's picture

really cool

I guess it's been a long time since Temmin's family had a heir devoted to the Lovers. It seems a lot more fun than the other paths! Sticking out tongue

MeiLin's picture

this is more than a devotion

Supplication is much more than a devotion. It is a form of priesthood. It is much, much more serious. Supplication to the Lovers' Temple also requires virginity, and few royals made it to 16. I think I have other thoughts on this but I am just trashed. Sticking out tongue

sarianna's picture

hmm.

Trashed MeiMei? This explains a lot.. j/k
(so once this book is over, what sort of booze should we all pitch in to buy you?)

MeiLin's picture

sober for nearly 21 years

So hoist your favorite and wish me luck for the coming chapters. Smiling

sarianna's picture

congrats!

good on you, m'dear! will do, tomorrow night. Smiling just gotta finish my writing (academic papers) tonight first!

fairnymph's picture

I adored the nature imagery

I adored the nature imagery and seeing that side of the Goddess - a very fittingly fertile side. Very sensorily enveloping on the whole with great nods especially to the visual and olfactory. Nerr was present but not intrusively so and I laughed at his reading Temmin's mind about the anal, hehe.

I was NOT expecting the oracular aspect which was a very pleasant surprise and I'm already trying to match it up with the details in the prologue (preface?) - also, Liberator of WHAT or WHOM - more mental whirring!

Aww, Temmin is so delightfully, realistically young and innocent yet not entirely incompetent.

Nye's picture

yes! the who or whom would

yes! the who or whom would be very important.

Also, the sensory exploration was very immersive. I really liked the descriptions and glimpses of so many things that brought Temmin love. He really does love his land, his people, his home. That, too, speaks of his heart. Could you imagine Harsin presented with the same array? His thoughts and emotions would be so different.

jj's picture

Liberator.

possibly the slaves mentioned a few chapters back. possibly more than that.

Watcher's picture

Portents

Signs, portents, prophecies. Such tricky things.

TheBoy's picture

almost exactly my thought.

"portentous" was the adjective I wanted.

LOVED it. My curiosity: which of the two is "the liberator," and which "the magnificent?"

V's picture

My interpretation

TheBoy wrote:
LOVED it. My curiosity: which of the two is "the liberator," and which "the magnificent?"

After casting the bones, poking at animal guts, or whatever other methods you imagine I've employed, this is my conclusion: the Liberator and the Magnificent are represented by the rotting fruit and conflict in equal shares. Don't be distracted by the splendor of the blessing...the prophecy had not yet begun.

Temmin is a spark, a catalyst, a key. The entire kingdom is wound like a spring: the slaves are one symptom, but there are other signs that tension is building...look at what happened to Fen's brother. There will be death, and there will be blood, and those points are not negotiable. King Temmin will be strong, charismatic and influential, but these are forces far beyond his control. They can't be tamed but they can be channeled.

His decision, roughly, will be to side with the populace as the Liberator, or the aristocracy as the Magnificent. Teacher and Jenks have made sure he has an unusual, even a shocking amount of exposure and connection with the commoners for a royal--whether Teacher is trying to afford him an informed decision or actually sway the vote I can't say.

Ellika against the soldiers speaks strongly to civil war. Sedra in peril suggests that it could be a larger conflagration.

MeiMei--I think this is proof that BPAL makes you a better writer and purchases are a legitimate business expense (It's a deduction! Tell the IRS!). Much of the chapter was driven by scent and taste...I have nfc what sandalwood smells like, but I'm sure it smells like Neya. Your experience and finesse there has carried over well when it comes to making an immersive scene.

MeiLin's picture

not know what sandalwood smells like?!

Oh, no, no. I think you would know the smell if you smelled it. Go to a health food store and find the essential oils; somewhere there's a bottle of sandalwood. It's this lovely, Asian, woody, smooth, sorta spicy...well, it's sandalwood, innit! Laughing out loud

And it's funny, Sir and I were getting coffee yesterday and I asked him what he thought about taking BPAL as a tax deduction! I definitely find it inspiring, and I actually am going to ask an accountant if I can deduct it. I write about it a lot, and there are times when I really couldn't write without it, especially my mojo bag.

Wumingde's picture

mmm

sandalwood is my favorite soap. its.. earthly. love it.

MeiLin's picture

Bee & Flower!

Bee & Flower sandalwood soap! ZOMG! love it. Have a drawerful of it. Not really kidding. V, look for that!

Nye's picture

Breathless.... That last look

Breathless....
That last look just gutted me. I can't imagine what it must have been like for Temmin.
The rest was wonderful... and very much not Allis and Issak, but all Neya and Nerr. Their delight was wonderful, and his innocence and eagerness to please was lovely.... so him. I could wish for more foreplay, but whose first time is anything but quick, if hopefully sweet?
But They see what is to come, and what may come.... as do others. Time rides down on Temmin like a loose charger.

thellieem11's picture

Oh yeah...

Breathing... what a novel idea...

I didn't even realize that I'd been holding my breath through the last of that. Well done.

Gudy's picture

Words fail.

That was... so many things. Too many to recount. But above all, it was sublimely beautiful.

While the portents give food for thought, what really sticks with me is the imagery. You've outdone yourself, MeiLin. Thank you.

*bows*

sarianna's picture

holy carp that was good.

...wow. I am speechless, I am astounded. Well done, MeiLin. Maybe I will be more coherent later. Wow.

first speculation: the child Sedra is shielding could be Harsin and Ansella's, rather than hers.... since this is in two years and Sedra's marriage is unlikely to be soon enough to produce a toddler....

manoki's picture

two years?

where does it say two years? I was thinking this was sometime in the future but at an unspecified time. Seems dark and scary, this choice and the times that precede it. I am full of foreboding.

kawaiikune's picture

Quote: "This is a night of

Quote:
"This is a night of secrets," She said. "You will not speak of this night, ever, to anyone, about what happens in this bed, and you will share the blessings you receive in this bed in Our service for two years. Do you agree?"

Did you mean this? I thought this just meant that he has to be a supplicant for two years, or has to serve other people in the rooms.

sarianna's picture

In combination with

In combination with this...

Quote:
"You will happen. You will choose to be either Temmin the Liberator or Temmin the Magnificent."

"This--this is the blessing?" he cried as he felt Her close in on him, pulling him into the ecstasy again.

"Yes!" She answered.

Which follows the description of the battlefield.

I could be entirely misreading it, but that was what I got from it.

MeiLin's picture

This is NOT in two years

That's a really interesting reading, but sadly, it is the incorrect one. Smiling :)

sarianna's picture

Thank goodness.

That is definitely a relief.

Though it must tie into the prologue somehow... hmm.

....and this is why I am a terrible literature student.

Katie's picture

-phew-

Wow. Just, uh....wow. That was amazing. More later.

SongCoyote's picture

I have to wait....

I started to read this on a break at work and I couldn't continue. I'll have to read it at home. Not because of the arguably NSFW content - my boss is pretty liberal about writing; images would be more problematic - but because it was too beautiful, and I was starting to cry harder and harder as I read, remembering things I've hoped for (and, with great gratitude to all involved, experienced) in the past. I finally just closed the browser window, wiped my eyes, and vowed to read it tonight.

Then I wanted to share this reaction with MeiLin and the other readers, so I came back, went to the bottom of the page without reading more, and wrote this. I don't know why I feel so compelled / rewarded by sharing how things make me feel, but it is so, and so I do.

Shining shards of dreams long past
Brought to conscious thought at last
With these hopes and memories
My soul becomes a bit more free

Doggerel, perhaps, but it's the best I can do at the moment. Love to you all, and may life be beautiful for you in as many ways as it can - and a few more besides.

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

Blue Coyote's picture

Woah

Wow, this was just wow. Jawdropping! I read it first thing this morning(since I knew it would be so totally NWS) in a quick hurry and without time to comment. Now work is over, I've reread it and still all I can think is wow.
Loved the imagery, the descriptions are exquisite! I swear I could taste Her myself Sticking out tongue So sweet.
Temmin is such a sweetheart, he will be a good king once he gets laid a few more times and can think of something else. Although it seems Sedra has more the natural inclination, and certainly is more involved. I suspect the child he saw was her own from this marraige to Brinnid but I guess we'll see. Temmin the Liberator is surely about the slaves being brought in, if he hears about it from Red(whose name escapes me at the moment... his sparring parter and Arta's beau) and takes it on himself to do something about it. Temmin the Magnificant is who knows, a fairly grand if vauge statement. Whichever he will surely be a beloved king I think(more than I-only-think-of-myself-and-my-own-pleasure Harsin)

Donna's picture

That was absolutely gorgeous.

That was absolutely gorgeous. I'll be honest, I first I was going WTF with the imagery and flowery stuff but once the whole sex with a goddess connection actually pinged in my head and then Neya mentioned that she was everything he could ever loved, it all made sense. It was an excellent look into popping Temmin's cherry without the awkwardness or the schmoopy sap than tends to come with such things. It was still, at the end of the day, a learning experience and I'm sure the most beautiful and memory-searing he'll ever experience.

Wonderful job, Mei! I clap for you, as always!

MeiLin's picture

thank you

Yeah, the flowery stuff I worried about. If there's one kind of sex writing I hate, it's the overly euphemistic flowery stuff that closely resembles this chapter. But having sex with Neya is not like having sex with a woman, and when I write these things happen I'm not being euphemistic.

Thank you very much for liking it. Smiling

Ladyshade's picture

I like how the story is

I like how the story is wrapped up in intense personal detail of a physical sort for the majority of the chapter and then, Wham! You introduce this entirely different, unexpected sort of climax furtherin other aspects of the story.

GreenGlass's picture

Beautiful

That was so beautiful and so idyllic! Idealistic even. I just loved reading that. Thank you, MeiLin! It wasn't choppy at all.

Ferret's picture

WOW

I'm breathless over here, after reading everything up so far from this book and the previous. I see a change in the writing style, and it's only better!

You've drawn me in so thoroughly, I've been up till 3am or later 2 days in a row because I just can't stop reading! Kudos, supreme job, and WOWOWOWOW to MeiLin. I think that was one of the most beautiful passages I've read in a long, long time.

MeiLin's picture

a change in style?

I'm curious as to what you see, if you wouldn't mind sharing. I honestly pay attention to respectful comments on my writing. ("You suck" isn't helpful. Eye-wink )

A's picture

We now know what sex with a goddess is like

Sacred sex...you've surpassed every expectation I had about this part of the story, Mei. You blew my mind. Day-amn, girl. You're pagan self ripped out a trancendent chapter, my dear.

I bow to you. I bow to the ground.

This is your finest work yet.

I almost need a cigarette except that seems vaguely sacriledgeous. And I don't even smoke.

Slaxor's picture

A very interesting chapter

...in more ways than one. Temmin could really learn a lot if he wasn't so distracted.

This whole business with the lovers temple makes me wonder what goes on at the temple of Farr. It's probably a lot less pleasant, but still might be interesting.

In fact, it would make for an excellent bonus story.

MeiLin's picture

don't worry

We'll be getting round to all the Temples in due time.

Daymon's picture

Powerful stuff...

Ok now that was steamy, yep the gods really know how to please a person. Good thing Temmin knew that he didn't know anything about women, that's a good first step to learning.

Temmin is on the path of choices, one leading to the prosperity of the kingdom and the other leads to the enslavement of his kingdom.

shmamoozle's picture

obligations of kings

I believe RUSH (the band) said it best. "And the men who hold high places must be the ones to start, to mold a new reality closer to the heart." Taking the viewpoint of Churchianity the obligation of a man is to be both king and priest in his "Family". This means he is as concerned with the spiritual growth and wellbeing as he is with finances and physical wellbeing of his subjects/family members. A heavy obligation but depending upon the heart of said man he will become either liberator or "The Magnificent". In the eyes of Diety you can be both but you have to have a heart toward the populace. And that heart must overrule mens desire to dominate and conquer. A heart that cries for justice and mercy in equal amounts is necessary. Does our young prince have this heart???We shall see i guess. Let us hope he makes the proper decisions at the crossroads that are right in front of him.

Peace, Shmamoozle

SongCoyote's picture

Thank you.

I cannot thank you enough. There is insufficient profundity in me to express how beautiful this was to me. It was difficult to finish even on the third attempt because I was weeping so much. I wish my muse was so willing to offer me such power in my songs and poetry as you have displayed here, MeiLin.

I have been close to the place Neya-in-Allis and Temmin went, though since I will never lie with or be a monarch I will never know in full the depth of that particular responsibility's joy and pleasure in rebuilding the strength of the land. I have a certain understanding of it, though, and I have enacted rituals like unto what you have described here... and only rarely do such things result in magic as deep and pervading as what Temmin is experiencing.

I feel I am babbling now and cannot make myself form more words. Except... thank you, again and again.

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

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