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Chapter 10 | The Queen who Ruled by Herself

Blows

Sedra had had an observer when she left the Keep, though she was unaware of it. Temmin had watched her stride purposefully into the woods from a few yards away, though she didn't see him where he stood on the path to the training salon. He would have followed her, but he had a date to spar with Fen; the former footman and Jenks were probably wondering where he was already.

He hurried into the building and found them in the sparring room, warming up. Fen and Jenks were working out on the big punching bag, Jenks holding it as Fen practiced his jabs and kicks. Sweat was already beading up on the young man's freckled, well-muscled body, making his newly-short hair stand up in wet spikes.

As soon as Temmin stepped into the room, bare to the waist and barefoot, Fen left off and bowed. "Your highness," he said.

"H'lo, Fen," Temmin replied. "How's the shoulder?" Fen's left shoulder was almost completely healed now; the giant bruise from the glancing kick he'd gotten from Jebby was now just a faint brown ring, and his left had looked as strong as ever on the punching bag.

"Fine, your highness, fine. I'm ready whenever you are," he said, bouncing on the balls of his feet.

"You're certainly eager," laughed Temmin, joining him on the mat.

"I'm always eager for a fight, your highness," grinned Fen. "It's something I'm good at."

"We shall see," said Temmin.

"Yes, young sir, we shall," said Jenks cryptically. "Take your stances, gentlemen." They bowed and sized each other up, Temmin jiggling loosely, Fen watching carefully until finally Temmin got impatient and launched a series of roundhouse kicks. Fen dodged some, blocked others and finally caught Temmin's foot between his legs, twisted round and dropped the prince neatly onto the mat. Temmin tried to kick up at him; Fen just batted his feet away until finally he aimed a kick downward. Temmin twisted and leapt to his feet, avoiding the kick.

"That was pathetic, the both of you," barked Jenks.

"Too right," mumbled Fen under his breath, but audible.

"Oh, really," said Temmin, eyes narrowing.This time he hung back and waited for Fen. The red-head calculated for a moment and aimed a kick, but Temmin was waiting. He countered with his longer reach and kept Fen from connecting, holding him at bay with a foot on Fen's hip. Fen spun away; Temmin followed him, throwing punches, and Fen came up over his arm, aiming for Temmin's head. He landed a punch on Temmin's left cheekbone, but the victory was short; Temmin grabbed Fen's arm, ducked down, flipped him over bodily and dropped them both to the mat. Fen took the involuntary somersault and came up scrambling, trying to pin Temmin.

Suddenly he let go: "Oh, shit! I mean, I beg your pardon! Mister Jenks, he's bleeding."

"I am?" said Temmin. He approached the mirror on the wall of the room and sure enough, now that the adrenaline was wearing off a bit, he could feel a nice bruise rising just below his eye, and a small cut above it was trickling down the side of his face. "Oh! So I am. Oh, never worry," he said with a grin as he saw his sparring partner's pale, grim face in the mirror. "I've had worse, and it's your job to paste me, isn't it?"

"I'm not going to jail or anything, am I?" said Fen.

"Don't be stupid," said Jenks shortly as he dabbed at the prince's cut with a styptic and Temmin winced. "If you could go to jail for that sort of thing I'd have been executed long ago, along with half the trainers in Farr's Temple."

"You've hit his highness?"

"His highness and his highness's uncle the Duke of Whithorse and a few other lords besides. The King himself, once, before he took the throne. Positively put Lord Patrin through his paces many a time, to be sure. See this?" He pointed to a ragged spot on his ear. "That's where the Duke bit me once."

"Bit you?!" said Temmin.

"Should've seen him, young sir," grinned Jenks. "All is just in war and lust, after all."

"So it is," said Temmin. "Shall we?"

Jenks took a firmer hand at this point, running them both through their forms and rapping out criticism as they sparred. "Why'd you cut your hair?" Temmin panted in between rounds. "You look like a convict!"

Fen didn't reply as he closed with Temmin. They wrestled to a standstill, and then suddenly he got an arm free; he pulled Temmin's long hair so hard, the prince yelped in surprise and dropped his grip on Fen, trying to loosen the hold on his hair. Fen shook him like a doll and threw him to the ground. "That's why, your highness!" he said, breathing hard. "I only grew it out when I got work here at the Keep. At Templestone I always kept it short. I never put vanity over practicality, and I preferred to win when I fought. Anything goes there."

"And here as well, Fen, here as well," said Jenks. "I want you to learn street-level fighting, your highness. Gentlemen's rules don't apply on the battlefield, and should you ever lose your horse, it's a hands-on affair, war is."

"I don't intend to lose my horse, but point well taken. It feels rather like lunch, am I correct?"

"You are, young sir. Fen, you're dismissed," said Jenks. "Go clean up a bit and help around the salon."

"Begging your pardon, Mister Jenks, but this is my afternoon off. Is that all right?" said Fen.

"Oh! Of course. Have you seen the paymaster? Yes? Off you go, then, lad, get cleaned up and off with you."

Fen bowed and took his leave, heading to the training salon baths. The baths were nothing like the ones at the Lovers' Temple; for starters, there was no actual bath. A row of taps in groups of two lined the tiled walls, a stool before each one with a bucket beside it. Wooden benches ran down the middle of the long room.

Fen placed the basket with his clean clothes on a bench. He fished out his towel, his flannel and his soap, stripped off his training trousers, and sat down on a stool, setting the bucket to fill from the hot and cold taps. He dumped it over his head, gasping, and set it to fill again while he soaped himself quickly. He rinsed off, making sure to get the soap from behind his ears, towelled himself dry and got dressed.

"Hittin' the town, eh, Wallek?" said the sergeant on duty at the salon desk as he left.

"Something like that," said Fen with a lopsided smile.

"Throw a few beers back and a few whores down for me, then, eh? I'm on restriction till the middle of Spring's End," said the sargeant sourly.

"I'll see what I can do," said Wallek with a half-salute.

But once he'd walked from the Keep into town, he didn't head for the taverns, nor the whorehouses. Fen kept walking until he came to the Temple District. At the edge stood the great white edifice that housed the Hearth, Venna's Temple. Beside it, even larger and more imposing, stood the Healer's House. He stopped for a moment, grimacing, then walked up the steps into the quiet reception hall.

Gray-robed Sisters and lay healers in civilian clothes trotted here and there through the hall, some had their arms full of bandages, others carried various jars of herbs and odd-looking liquids. Before the great desk where a group of postulants and Sisters waited on people were ranks of benches, on which waited the sick and injured for their turn.

He walked up to the desk. "Yes?" said an older Sister quietly.

"I'm looking for my brother, Bernid Wallek," said Fen. "He's been here some time now, about two weeks?"

"Wallek, Wallek," said the Sister as she thumbed through a set of cards in a tray. "Bernid Wallek. Yes. Brought in by the police--" she gave Fen a suspicious glance-- "on the 24th of this spoke. You're the first to come see him. Relative?"

"I'm his younger brother. I've had to work," said Fen defensively, "and I didn't even know until last week."

"Fine, fine," said the Sister, distractedly. "He's on the third floor, ward four. Elevators are for patients and staff only." Fen turned to go. "Wait! Are you responsible for Mister Wallek?"

"I--well, he's my brother, does that make me responsible?"

"Only if you choose to be," sniffed the Sister. "Just know that Mister Wallek has racked up quite a bill and is still quite injured. He will need family support."

Fen nodded and headed for the stairs. As he climbed up past the first and second to the third floor, he wondered what his brother had been up to this time, and he hoped that whatever they'd done to him it hadn't disabled him permanently. He found ward four and enquired of the Sister on duty for his brother. She nodded and took him to a bed where a young man with reddish-brown hair and a freckled face lay sleeping.

Fen sat down in the chair next to the bed and looked his brother over. He'd been badly beaten. His face showed signs of old bruises, and his nose had been broken. Several cuts had been stitched up and were still healing. More troubling were the casts on both his arms and his right leg to the hip.

"Bern?" said Fen softly, taking the tips of his brother's fingers. "Bern? It's me, Fen."

Bern's eyelids fluttered for a moment, then he turned with a start. "Fen?" He gave a little wince of a smile. "It's so good to see you, little brother. How'd you know I was here?"

Fen grimaced. "I went to see you at your boarding house two weeks ago, and they told me you'd been arrested. It took me days to find out where you were. I paid your rent, by the way."

"Thank you, Fen," murmured Bern. "I'll figure out a way to repay you once I pay off the Hearth bill."

"You will not pay me back, Bernid Wallek, unless by paying me back you mean you'll go home to Templestone and stop this rabble-rousing," said Fen in a sharp undertone. "If not for your own sake, for mine. If anyone checking my background found you in it, I'd lose my job at the Keep. And I rather like my job."

"You like polishing the silver of the king, eh?"

"No, I like pasting the Heir in the eye--I'm the prince's sparring partner now," said Fen with some pride. "Gave him a black eye just this morning."

"That's more like it," said his brother approvingly. "Help me with some water, please?" Fen held the cup to his brother's lips and he took a long pull. Fen wiped Bern's lips with the napkin on the table. "Thank you. Do Mam and Dad know I'm here? Please don't tell them."

Fen frowned, but said. "I won't, for now. So what were you doing this time?"

Bern sighed. "I only tried to talk to the Heir."

The Intimate History books are drafts. Keep that in mind as you read. A fully edited and revised version of each book will appear beginning in 2010.

Scryer's Gulch stands and falls on its own, a true soap opera. Never look back, never revise, just make shit up to explain those plot holes away! Yeehaw!

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Computer Mad Scientist's picture

I was wondering what happened

I was wondering what happened to that guy...
You seem to have the chapters in alphabetical order instead of in numeric order, by the way. Just thought I'd tell you.

sarianna's picture
Devotee

I can't recall...

Have we seen him before? When? (I know my mind is a bit addled right now, but I did think I had most of this story cleanly laid out...)

"Loneliness is not a problem. Loneliness is nothing to be solved." -Pema Chödrön

MeiLin's picture
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In Book One

Chapter 22. A young man in workman's clothes tries to talk to Temmin and Ellika when they're out walking and is brutally beaten by Temmin's security detail.

sarianna's picture
Devotee

Thanks, that's much clearer

Well, that sheds a lot of light on the palace world outside Temmin's little bubble, then. The palace guards might be protective of Temmy, but their overall suspicion seems a little, er, heavy-handed, for a relatively small city and kingdom.

My poor school-addled brain is drawing parallels to modern politics. Perhaps it's time for me to go to bed.

"Loneliness is not a problem. Loneliness is nothing to be solved." -Pema Chödrön

V's picture
Embodiment

Muahaha

I started getting a sense of premonition that we'd seen this guy before, somewhere around "he wondered what his brother had been up to this time, and he hoped that whatever they'd done to him it hadn't disabled him permanently" and it only grew stronger until the last line wasn't even much of a surprise Smiling

Go back and read the comments to Ch. 22, especially MeiLin's "standard": there are large arcs of plot where we've only just skimmed the surface. Don't think iceberg, think "spot of slightly muddy ocean water signaling a gigantic underwater seamount"

Wow! Sarcasm! That's original!

Gudy's picture
Embodiment

Heh, I just re-read that chapter...

... for checking out various stuff in the wiki, so it's nice to meet the guy again.

In other news, I've just done some thinking about certain numbers and factoids in the wiki, and I most emphatically don't like the answers they suggest.

MeiLin's picture
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do tell!

What do they suggest? Not that I'll tell you if you're right--or wrong--I'm just curious!

Gudy's picture
Embodiment

Poor Ilhovin

... sums it up, really: according to Teacher, the magic of the royal line of Tremont got lost one year into Ilhovin's reign. That can't bode well for the guy, and it makes me wonder about the royal fuckup which precipitated that kind of desaster. Sad

kawaiikune's picture
Embodiment

Man, if I really wanted to

Man, if I really wanted to get a message to the Heir, and I had a brother who worked at the keep, I think I'd have a chat with the brother. Also, it's surprising to me that someone would be more interested in talking to the heir, who seems to hold very little current power, than in talking to the king. Maybe it was just an opportunity that presented itself. I'm a little sad that the story looks like it ends when Temmin becomes king. I think it would be interesting to see the result of all of this in what kind of king he turns out to be.

Kunama's picture
Petitioner

Story ends?

Don't suggest such a thing, you'll jinx it! I hope it doesn't end there either - although I have to admit I'm looking forward to the revealing of Teacher's nature/past/etc.

MeiLin's picture
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it was to have ended there

...with Teacher's story on Temmin's coronation day. Now I'm not so sure; I can see a lot of story after that now. The thing is, at the rate I'm going it's going to take years and years to get even that far! I'm going to have to do some time compression soon. I'm still setting up all the characters and plot threads, believe it or not.

MeiLin's picture
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opportunity

Bern didn't know Temmin would be out walking. And as for getting a message to the Heir or the King via Fen--Fen, as far as he knew, was a junior footman. That's one step up from boot black. The chances of him even MEETING the family (apart from seeing them) were infinitely small. And if Fen had actually had the temerity to say something without being spoken to first, Affton would have fired him instantly.

Remember, the custom is that if a member of the family (or their guests) comes into a room where you are working--or even if you pass them in the hall--you are to turn your face to the wall and be silent until they leave or you are dismissed. You are treated like part of the furniture. There are exceptions--preparing the hall for the big dance, for instance, where there were dozens of people working, or if a family member came down into the servants' domains. Work doesn't stop in the kitchen if Temmin comes rummaging for a snack or when he leaves via the mudroom door.

At the time Bern approached Temmin, Fen wasn't Temmin's sparring partner. Now that he is? Who knows.

MeiLin's picture
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eeek!

wha happa? Thanks, I'll go correct it.

MeiLin's picture
Most High

fixed

thanks!

Voyeur's picture

Newest first

Hello, I'm loving the story, it just keeps getting better! Also, for some reason the "newest first" link and URL are linking to your blog and NOT the newest story. This happened a couple days ago out of the blue, thought you'd like to know. Keep up the good work!

MeiLin's picture
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on purpose

People were missing forum and blog entries, and often those were very important--like, "I'm taking the week off." Smiling If you want JUST the chapters newest first, bookmark this:

http://www.meilinmiranda.com/taxonomy/term/1

but you'll miss out on a lot of other fun stuff here. Smiling

manoki's picture
Supplicant

How do you come up with names?

They are creative and interesting...and some seem faintly familiar, but not enough to figure out the connection.

MeiLin's picture
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I honestly couldn't say

I originally had more conventional names, but a couple of early readers said it took away from the fairy tale/otherworldly experience, so I changed the spelling. From there, it just sort of evolved that the "-in" suffix connotated Tremontine male nobility. No one else is allowed to use it, and you've probably already noted that all the kings' names end in "-in."

"-ik" (the masculine) and "-ka" (the feminine) indicates a name that probably originated in Leutefloss.

"-ig" and "-id" endings are of Sairish origin.

Past that I haven't figured it.

Nye's picture
Supplicant

Temmin's sparring needs more

Temmin's sparring needs more than a fair bit of work. Interesting to note they mostly lead with their feet. I'd be interested to see what sort of sword style they have in Tremont. I haven't seen much in the way of weaponry yet in the story. The cavalry keeps coming up, but they have to fight with something.

"A gift of the spirits is in equal parts a curse." -AK

MeiLin's picture
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Not entirely his fault

Quote:

Temmin's sparring needs more than a fair bit of work.

That's mostly because his creator's fight scene writing needs a fair bit of work! I'm researching. I need to go spend more time taking notes at the dojo where I write; there's an actual martial arts dojo next door run by the same people and we're invited to hang there as well.

Nye's picture
Supplicant

understood

that's pretty cool that they let you watch.

My pet in college began teaching me sword technique. My former Master continued training me in sword and hand-to-hand. I picked up a little of other weaponry then, but sword is still my preferred. I found early on that my joints are just too weak for hand-to hand. My husband, though. He rocks the hand-to-hand and knows far too many submission holds. He's managed to teach me a few, but he can kick my ass. I swear the not-so-little masochist just does it to egg me on. I'm still better with sword.

"A gift of the spirits is in equal parts a curse." -AK

manoki's picture
Supplicant

Is this the husband

Nye wrote:
My husband, though. He rocks the hand-to-hand and knows far too many submission holds. He's managed to teach me a few, but he can kick my ass.

Is this the husband with the joint pain? How come he can make war but not love? Puzzled

Nye's picture
Supplicant

Not really recent

We don't really play rough these says. No full-body drag-out wrestling matches like years ago. Still, all he needs to pin me most times is a step and twist of the wrist. It's not that challenging. Most of his joint issues are knees & lower, and yes, a lot due to things like this.

"A gift of the spirits is in equal parts a curse." -AK

Vandole's picture
Postulant

The fight description wasn't

The fight description wasn't that bad. I interpreted most of it as Temmin having a skewed idea of what works in a fight. A series of roundhouse kicks is very impractical - Either he's returning to the leg up position which hardly allows him to put any real force into it, or Fen is just letting him go back to a neutral stance and throwing another one.

One thing that jarred me though, is Fen catching a roundhouse with his legs. Roundhouse is a mid-to-high kick, so Fen must be pretty damn talented. An opponent catching a roundhouse typically moves towards you while bending the leg up, puts a hand on your shoulder, and hooks his leg under yours while pushing your torso, back with the hand, taking your feet out from under and landing you on your back.

I'm no end table, I'm a nightstand.

MeiLin's picture
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two things

Fen was trying not to hurt Temmin (despite pasting him in the eye), and I was writing this stuff off some sparring videos, just watching and describing.

Han-pan's picture
Postulant

Vocab

I think all you lack there then is the vocabulary to describe exactly what it is you're seeing.
I'm sure you have more than enough people here who have a martial arts background (myself included!) who would be more than happy to help you out with that ^___^

<3 Looking forward to more as always Shocked

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Mangosta's picture

typo?

"some carrying arms full of bandages, others various jars of herbs and odd-looking liquids" I'm thinking there's a slight typo here. It looks like "some with arms full of bandages, others carrying..." is what you wanted to get across. While it could be argued that carrying is being used as a gerund, not using it as a verb leaves an incomplete phrase...

This is a great chapter. Love how the episode with the guy that got beaten when he tried to approach Temmin is coming full circle. You have a wonderful talent for building suspense.

MeiLin's picture
Most High

wow

That was a bad bit of writing. Fixed, thanks.

I was happy to return to Bern and his story; he just sorta popped up out of nowhere when I was writing about Temmin and Ellika on the Promenade, and I've thought about him a lot since. I discovered he was Fen's older brother (not oldest--the oldest is still in Templestone at the forge with their father, and I think Fen is the youngest of three boys, which is why he's good at fighting), and then his story started to coalesce a little. It's still coming together, but he's starting to tell me things...

NekoMegi's picture
Petitioner

^_^

I like how you describe your characters as speaking to you and such. I did that at work with something I was writing and an older lady laughed and told me I must have been possessed. She found it a rather odd way of phrasing things.

But they do, don't they? The best characters and stories aren't the ones that we make up, they're the ones that tell themselves to us and we just write it down.

SongCoyote's picture
Devotee

Temmin's Policies

Methinks that if only Fen would tell Temmin about his brother's experience, Temmin would have a little chat with his securty detail (through his father, if necessary) about administering such sound beatings, especially as there was no direct intimation that Bernid had done anything other than try to approach Temmin with a message.

I realize that they protect the Heir assiduously, but (as Temmin might interject) good grief man, there are limits! It's not like he was holding a loaded crossbow or advocating Temmin's death or other removal method.

Draconian measures are generally not good for the populace's mental well-being in the long run. They might have their place in one specific instance, but in the long run they will cost more than the rulers will gain.

At least, that's how one silly Coyote sees it.

Light and laughter,
SongCoyote

random_name's picture

Thank You + Typo

Thank you for providing such an excellent story! I stumbled upon it yesterday (most reviews on Pages Unbound) and I'm now on book two. At this rate, I'll be caught up in time for Thursday's update, if not Tuesday's.

I don't know if you're interested in typo reports at this point, but I noticed that "sergeant" was mispelled "sargeant" once.

MeiLin's picture
Most High

thank you

Usually I don't go back this late to correct (these are drafts, after all), but I'll make a note of it in the main manuscript. Welcome to the History!

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