In sex scenes, I want

  • Posted on: 10 August 2008
  • By: MeiLin

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DrMorganes's picture

Petitioner

Not much reason to change, I think. "More accurate" sounds like you're going to go text-book or stroke story on us. Neither of those really fits the way you're presenting the story. "More euphemistic" strikes me as "reducing the MPAA rating", which I think is horribly unfair to the present audience.

Simply put, you're an R-rated story, no one under 18 admitted without parent.

Don't change a thing.

Arath's picture

Reading this would be a little awkward with a parent...

thingsthatmakenoise's picture

I agree, but "Leave it the way it is" wasn't an option!

TheBoy's picture

Embodiment

I want:

the author to write naturally. }:)

MeiLin's picture

Most High

I wasn't asking for direction, folks. Wink

OMG I'm so glad I'm home. I just had a flash of pure gratitude...

TheBoy's picture

Embodiment

I, also, meant in general. I want sex scenes to read naturally.

V's picture

Embodiment

about hot flashes, because it'd probably lead to TMI. But I'd also vote for "write naturally". Fine like it is Smile

MeiLin's picture

Most High

At least, Sir says I sleep through them...

NuanaIvy's picture

Devotee

Keep it as is! Smile It's best that way.

lalalala's picture

I voted for “euphemistic,” but now that I think about it, that’s not what I really want from a sex scene. What I look for is character’s reactions to HOW they feel. For instance, when Temmin and Issak first ‘got it on’ (there’s a crappy euphemism for you Smile ) the writing did nothing for me. Actually, it sort of grossed me out. There was a lack of emotional connection between the characters, and some of the terminology used was less than appealing. On the other hand, the scenes with Twenna and Harsin I found well written because (as far as I could tell) they were not meant to arouse but to elaborate on Harsin’s frame of mind and Tremont in general. I loved the sex scenes between Emma and Warin. Even Emma and…everyone else, because your writing captured her own confusion, distress and desire so well. It was disturbing and, at times, hard for me to continue, but you wrote it well.

I still prefer consenting sex however, so kudos again to Emma and Warin

I realize plenty of readers will disagree with me, but I love this story, and it’s nice to have input. Thanks Mel! I hope this was usefull.

Willow's picture

Devotee

... really varies a lot. I found that scene between Temmin and Issak very hot and I read it more than once. }:)

Yeti's picture

Devotee

with the horde that prefers it as-is. There are a few times where creative synonyms for genitalia irk me, but I don't think I've actually encountered that in this story. For the most part I think the 'euphemistic' language of the schmexy scenes tend to communicate more mood and emotion than 'insert tab a into slot b' type writing would get across.

viruslife's picture

Supplicant

Hey since everyone is say this is for general but the two main options say more, more than what. As we all read a history we shall have to compare to it. However its perfect, so the option does not exist, so I shall add my as is.

Viruslife (very sleepy today :()

kawaiikune's picture

Embodiment

As long as nothing changes, it will be exactly what I want. I hate most people's sexy writing, and I read this like it's my job. Even the things I'm not into are hot.

Ladyshade's picture

I can't say I'd suggest any change either. Though, I'm not much of a writer myself so maybe mine isn't much of an opinion! lol. I think this story is written very fluidly and with attention to details from many different angles. Which ends up making it more vibrant than most things I've read.

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